Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih natural dan efektif. Hindari penggunaan frasa yang berlebihan seperti 'to be obeyed to' dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih langsung dan jelas. Gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide dengan lebih baik.

예시: Yes, when I was in high school, there were many rules, but the most important one was that students had to wear uniforms to school.

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan linking words untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Hindari pengulangan kata 'creating' dan gunakan variasi kosakata yang relevan.

예시: I don't think adding more rules would help because too many rules can make students feel overwhelmed, and they might be more likely to disobey them.

제안: Perbaiki kejelasan dan tata bahasa kalimat. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, serta hindari frasa yang membingungkan seperti 'taught how to leave'. Tambahkan detail spesifik tentang mengapa guru tersebut baik.

예시: Yes, when I was in high school, there was a teacher named Iburani who taught me math very well and also taught me important life lessons beyond the school subjects.

× ...but the most primary rules I think student have to wear some uniform to go to the school.

✓ ...but the most primary rule I think students have is to wear a uniform to go to school.

The word 'rules' should be singular 'rule' because it refers to the main or most important one. 'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the verb 'have'. 'Some uniform' is incorrect; 'a uniform' is the correct singular form. 'To the school' is better as 'to school' in this context.

× I don't think creating more rules will work out because creating many rules for students just make them burnout and also students tend to disobey for any rules that are created for them.

✓ I don't think creating more rules will work out because creating many rules for students just makes them burn out and also students tend to disobey any rules that are created for them.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'creating many rules'. 'Burnout' as a verb should be two words 'burn out'. The preposition 'for' after 'disobey' is incorrect and should be removed.

× ...there was a teacher called Iburani that taught me a very good math area and also she taught how to leave rather than only the school materials or materials.

✓ ...there was a teacher called Iburani who taught me a very good area of math and also she taught me how to live rather than only the school materials.

'That' should be 'who' when referring to a person. 'Math area' is better expressed as 'area of math'. 'Taught how to leave' is incorrect; it should be 'taught me how to live'. The phrase 'or materials' is redundant and unnecessary.