Part 1
시험관
Are there any rules for students at your school?
수험생
Yes, there are many rules in my school. I will give out three examples. The first one is we have to keep our hair neat and the second one is we cannot bring our phone to school and the third one is we have to wear our uniform and wear the specific color of shoes.
시험관
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
수험생
Umm, my answer is yes. The rules may let us know how students should be behave and so we can pay more attention on our study instead of paying attention on other things else.
시험관
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
수험생
Yes, I have a teacher who does her job very well. She's my chemistry teacher and she always puts a lot of effort when teaching us.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
점수: 75.0제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect your points smoothly and provide a clear topic sentence. For example, start with a general statement about rules, then list examples using linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
예시: Yes, my school has several rules to maintain discipline. Firstly, we must keep our hair neat. Secondly, bringing phones to school is not allowed. Finally, we have to wear our uniform along with shoes of a specific color.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
점수: 65.0제안: Avoid filler words like 'Umm' and improve grammar for clarity. Use linking words to explain your opinion logically and provide specific reasons. For example, start with your opinion, then explain why with clear reasons and examples.
예시: Yes, I believe more rules would benefit students because they help us understand proper behaviour. As a result, we can focus better on our studies instead of getting distracted by other things.
Do you have a teacher who does his or her job very well?
점수: 70.0제안: Enhance your answer by adding more specific details and using linking words to make it more coherent. For example, mention what makes her teaching effective and how it benefits you.
예시: Yes, I have a chemistry teacher who does her job very well. She always puts a lot of effort into preparing lessons, which helps us understand difficult concepts better.
× The rules may let us know how students should be behave and so we can pay more attention on our study instead of paying attention on other things else.
✓ The rules may let us know how students should behave and so we can pay more attention to our study instead of paying attention to other things.
The verb 'behave' should be in its base form after 'should' (modal verb), not 'be behave'. Also, the correct preposition after 'pay attention' is 'to', not 'on'. The phrase 'other things else' is redundant; 'other things' suffices.
× The rules may let us know how students should be behave and so we can pay more attention on our study instead of paying attention on other things else.
✓ The rules may let us know how students should behave and so we can pay more attention to our study instead of paying attention to other things.
The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used after 'pay attention'. The correct preposition is 'to'. Also, 'other things else' is redundant; 'other things' is sufficient.