Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and linking words. For example, instead of 'besides you should wear the uniform of the school,' say 'Yes, students must wear the school uniform.' Also, avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'steer ruler'—perhaps you meant 'ruler.' Use linking words like 'also' or 'in addition' to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, students must wear the school uniform. In addition, they are not allowed to eat breakfast or any food in the classroom; instead, they should eat during the break. Also, students are not permitted to bring rulers to class.

제안: Improve your answer by making it more concise and using linking words to connect your ideas. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'it's rules' should be 'these rules.' Try to explain why more rules might benefit students with specific reasons.

예시: Yes, I believe more rules could benefit students because they help ensure safety and order. For example, clear rules can prevent accidents and promote respect among students.

제안: Make your answer more structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding specific supporting details using linking words. Also, correct grammar and word choice, for example, 'the commitment person' is unclear; you might say 'she was very committed.' Avoid repeating similar ideas like 'good sense of humor' and 'very funny.'

예시: Yes, I had a teacher named Miss Hanan who did her job very well. She explained lessons clearly and made classes enjoyable with her good sense of humor. Moreover, she was very committed and always supported her students.

× Yes, besides you should wear the uniform of the school.

✓ Yes, besides, you should wear the school uniform.

The sentence is missing a comma after 'besides' to separate the introductory phrase. Also, 'the uniform of the school' is better expressed as 'the school uniform' for natural English usage.

× Also you shouldn't eat your breakfast or your food in the class and the best time that you should eat it in the break.

✓ Also, you shouldn't eat your breakfast or your food in the class; the best time to eat it is during the break.

The sentence needs commas and better conjunctions to separate ideas clearly. 'The best time that you should eat it in the break' is awkward; it should be 'the best time to eat it is during the break.' This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Also you cannot take a steer ruler.

✓ Also, you cannot take a steel ruler.

The word 'steer' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'steel' when referring to a type of ruler. Also, a comma after 'Also' improves sentence flow.

× Yes. I mean, at the end of the day, schools make these rules to preserve students and to make sure that they are safe.

✓ Yes. I mean, at the end of the day, schools make these rules to protect students and to make sure that they are safe.

The verb 'preserve' is not appropriate when referring to students; 'protect' is the correct verb to use in this context.

× And I think it's rules that students should obey and should respect it.

✓ And I think these are rules that students should obey and respect.

The sentence has redundancy and incorrect pronoun use. 'It's rules' should be 'these are rules.' Also, 'should obey and should respect it' is redundant and 'it' is unnecessary; 'obey and respect' suffice.

× Yes, I remember Miss Hanan.

✓ Yes, I remember Miss Hanan.

This sentence is correct; 'remember' is present tense and appropriate here because the memory is current.

× And Miss Hanan was a very good teacher and she could explain the information very easily and she had a good sense of humor and also she was very funny And the commitment person, lovely one.

✓ And Miss Hanan was a very good teacher. She could explain the information very easily, had a good sense of humor, and was very funny. She was also a committed and lovely person.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. 'The commitment person' is incorrect; it should be 'a committed person.' Breaking the sentence into smaller parts and correcting word choice improves clarity and grammar.