Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and structured. For example, instead of repeating 'dress code', you can say 'The dress code requires students to wear traditional clothes such as a butter Khamis and shelvar. Additionally, girls must wear shirts that cover their knees.' This will make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: At my school, there are specific rules regarding the dress code. Students are required to wear traditional clothes, including a butter Khamis and shelvar. Moreover, all girls must ensure their shirts extend below the knees, which is strictly enforced.

제안: Your answer expresses a clear opinion but lacks completion and clarity. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'for most of the times' and be more direct. For example, you can say, 'I disagree because every individual is unique and should have the freedom to express their creativity. Therefore, too many rules might restrict personal expression.'

예시: I disagree with having more rules because every student is unique and deserves the freedom to express their creativity. Too many rules can limit individuality and make students feel restricted.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains hesitations. To improve, try to finish your sentences fully and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of why the teacher is good. For instance, you could say, 'Miss Hodeja, my university teacher, is excellent because she explains psychological testing concepts clearly and ensures all students understand the material.'

예시: One of my university teachers, Miss Hodeja, is exceptional. She taught a course on psychological testing and explained every concept clearly. Moreover, she made sure that all students understood the material by encouraging questions and providing detailed examples.

× In my school there are rules for children that include dressing code or dress code includes wearing traditional clothes, which is a butter uh Khamis, and a shelvar which is a long shirt and flowy pants.

✓ In my school there are rules for children that include a dress code which includes wearing traditional clothes, such as a butter uh Khamis and a shelvar, which is a long shirt and flowy pants.

The phrase 'dressing code or dress code includes' is awkward and incorrect. The correct preposition and article usage is 'a dress code which includes'. Also, 'such as' is better to introduce examples of traditional clothes. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Your shirt should also be below your knees, which is something that all girls have to follow.

✓ Your shirt should also be below your knees, which is a rule that all girls have to follow.

The phrase 'which is something that all girls have to follow' is vague and awkward. Replacing 'something' with 'a rule' clarifies the meaning and improves the sentence structure.

× I tend to disagree with this statement for most of the times, especially because I feel every individual is different and every individual has the right to express their artistic abilities and express their individuality, which is why I feel like rules kind of bind people to a certain.

✓ I tend to disagree with this statement most of the time, especially because I feel every individual is different and has the right to express their artistic abilities and individuality, which is why I feel rules kind of bind people to certain limits.

The phrase 'for most of the times' is incorrect; it should be 'most of the time'. Also, 'every individual has the right' is better than repeating 'every individual'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'to a certain', which is incomplete; adding 'limits' completes the thought. These corrections improve sentence structure and clarity.

× One of my teachers in university who's called Miss Hodeja has been one of the greatest teachers that I have had the pleasure to be studying with.

✓ One of my teachers at university, who is called Miss Hodeja, has been one of the greatest teachers I have had the pleasure of studying with.

The phrase 'in university who's called' should be 'at university, who is called' for correct preposition and relative clause usage. Also, 'the pleasure to be studying with' is awkward; 'the pleasure of studying with' is correct. These changes improve sentence structure and grammar.

× She has taught me, uh, a course which is called testing, psychological testing and she explained every concept in detail very well and she made sure everyone was.

✓ She has taught me a course called psychological testing, explained every concept in detail very well, and made sure everyone understood.

The sentence is fragmented and ends abruptly with 'everyone was'. Removing filler words like 'uh' and restructuring the sentence for clarity and completeness improves the flow. Adding 'understood' completes the thought. This correction addresses sentence structure errors.