Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. Ayrıca, cevap biraz dağınık ve doğal değil. Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve net yapmak için gereksiz tekrarları kaldırmalı ve daha doğrudan konuya odaklanmalısınız. Ayrıca, "mystical's rules" ifadesi anlam açısından uygun değil, bunun yerine "school rules" gibi daha doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

예시: I'm not currently a student, but I know that schools have rules to help students become more disciplined and responsible.

제안: Cevabınızda anlam belirsizliği ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. "Will be will be inside a balance" ifadesi anlaşılması zor. Cümlenizi daha açık ve mantıklı hale getirmek için basit ve doğru yapılar kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, düşüncenizi desteklemek için nedenlerini veya örnekleri ekleyebilirsiniz.

예시: I believe there should be a balance in the number of rules at school because too many rules can make students feel restricted and less motivated.

제안: Cevabınızda cümle yapısı karışık ve anlam net değil. "He had some disciplines" ifadesi yanlış kullanılmış. Daha açık ve doğal cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, öğretmenin neden iyi olduğunu açıklayan spesifik detaylar eklemek faydalı olur.

예시: Although I'm not a student now, I had an excellent teacher in the past who was very disciplined and always explained lessons clearly.

× Actually, I'm not a student, I'm a professional worker. But if I had to talk about this mystical's rules, of of course there are some rules at the school.

✓ Actually, I'm not a student, I'm a professional worker. But if I had to talk about this school's rules, of course there are some rules at the school.

The phrase 'mystical's rules' is incorrect because 'mystical' is an adjective and cannot possess something. The correct possessive form is 'school's rules'. Also, 'of of course' is a repetition and should be 'of course'.

× In my opinion, putting some rules will be will be inside a balance.

✓ In my opinion, putting some rules will be a balance.

The phrase 'will be will be inside a balance' is incorrect and redundant. The correct expression is 'will be a balance' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Otherwise, if there are many rules at schools for children, I think it is not good things for students to become them.

✓ Otherwise, if there are many rules at schools for children, I think it is not good for students to become like that.

The phrase 'it is not good things' mixes singular 'it' with plural 'things'. It should be 'it is not good'. Also, 'to become them' is unclear; 'to become like that' or 'to become that way' is more appropriate.

× He actually in in present, I'm not a student, so if I had to talk about my prowess, education and so I had a perfect teacher who did his job very well.

✓ He actually, at present, I'm not a student, so if I had to talk about my previous education, I had a perfect teacher who did his job very well.

The sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. 'in in present' should be 'at present'. 'prowess, education and so' is unclear; 'previous education' is clearer. The sentence is split for clarity.

× He had some disciplines.

✓ He was disciplined.

'He had some disciplines' is incorrect because 'disciplines' refers to fields of study or rules, not a personal quality. The intended meaning is likely that he was disciplined or had discipline.