Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains some language errors and awkward phrasing, such as "help mention order" which is unclear. To improve, use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, there are several rules at my school to maintain discipline and a respectful environment. For instance, students are required to wear uniforms and arrive on time for classes. These rules help create an orderly atmosphere that is conducive to learning.

제안: Your response has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "a rules help mention discipline" and "clerk guidelines." To improve, focus on correct grammar, clearer vocabulary, and use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: I believe that having more rules can be beneficial to some extent because they help maintain discipline and create a structured learning environment. For example, clear guidelines on behavior and attendance can encourage students to be more responsible and focused.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but contains several unclear or incorrect phrases such as "makes lessons in jazz" and "Her detections are clear." To improve, use precise vocabulary and correct expressions, and connect your ideas with linking words for clarity.

예시: Yes, I have a teacher who does her job very well. She is passionate about teaching and always makes lessons interesting by using real-life examples. Her explanations are clear, which has greatly helped me understand difficult topics better.

× These rules help mention order and atmosphere for learning.

✓ These rules help maintain order and create a good atmosphere for learning.

The phrase 'help mention order and atmosphere' is incorrect because 'mention' is not the appropriate verb here. The intended meaning is that the rules help keep or maintain order and a positive atmosphere. Using 'maintain' and 'create' correctly conveys this meaning.

× I believe that having more rules for students can be beneficial to some extent, as a rules help mention discipline and create a structured learning environment.

✓ I believe that having more rules for students can be beneficial to some extent, as rules help maintain discipline and create a structured learning environment.

The phrase 'as a rules help mention discipline' is incorrect because 'a rules' is grammatically wrong (mixing singular article 'a' with plural noun 'rules') and 'mention' is not the correct verb. The correct phrase is 'as rules help maintain discipline' to express that rules support discipline.

× For example, clerk guidelines on behavior and attendance can encourage students to be responsible and focused.

✓ For example, clear guidelines on behavior and attendance can encourage students to be responsible and focused.

The word 'clerk' is incorrect here; the intended adjective is 'clear' to describe the guidelines. 'Clear guidelines' means guidelines that are easy to understand, which fits the context.

× She's very passionate about teaching and always makes lessons in jazz by using real life examples.

✓ She's very passionate about teaching and always makes lessons interesting by using real life examples.

The phrase 'makes lessons in jazz' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the intended meaning is that she makes lessons lively or interesting. 'Makes lessons interesting' is the correct phrase. Also, 'real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as an adjective, but this is a minor style point.

× Her detections are clear.

✓ Her explanations are clear.

The word 'detections' is incorrect in this context. The intended word is 'explanations' to indicate that her explanations are clear and helpful.