Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りと冗長な表現を避け、より自然で明確な答えを心がけましょう。例えば、「There is a rule about hairstyles at my school. Girls are not allowed to have short hair.」のように簡潔に述べると良いです。

예시: There is a rule about hairstyles at my school. Girls are not allowed to have short hair.

제안: 文法の誤りや繰り返しを避け、理由を明確に述べることが大切です。例えば、「I don't think more rules would help because strict rules might discourage students from studying or playing sports enthusiastically.」のように表現しましょう。

예시: I don't think more rules would help because strict rules might discourage students from studying or playing sports enthusiastically.

제안: 時制の一致や文の構造を改善し、具体的な説明を加えましょう。例えば、「Yes, when I was in high school, I had a teacher who explained the reasons behind the rules clearly, so many students respected her.」のように言うと良いです。

예시: Yes, when I was in high school, I had a teacher who explained the reasons behind the rules clearly, so many students respected her.

× Yes, there is a rule that the about the hair style.

✓ Yes, there is a rule about the hairstyle.

The phrase 'that the about the hair style' is incorrect and redundant. The correct expression is 'there is a rule about the hairstyle.' This fixes the sentence structure and removes unnecessary words.

× In my school girls cannot have short hair.

✓ In my school, girls cannot have short hair.

A comma is needed after 'In my school' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause. The sentence is otherwise correct in singular/plural usage.

× I don't think so because it is sad that if there is strict rules, the students don't study hard or don't play sports hard hard.

✓ I don't think so because it is sad that if there are strict rules, the students don't study hard or don't play sports hard.

'Rules' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number. Also, 'hard hard' is a repetition and should be corrected to a single 'hard'.

× Yes, when I was in high school I have a teacher who and she can explain why there is a rule more clearly.

✓ Yes, when I was in high school, I had a teacher who could explain why there was a rule more clearly.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time is in the past ('when I was in high school'), the verbs should be in past tense: 'had' instead of 'have', 'could' instead of 'can', and 'was' instead of 'is'. Also, 'who and she' is redundant; 'who' alone suffices.

× So many students follow her.

✓ So many students followed her.

Since the previous sentence is in past tense, this sentence should also be in past tense to maintain consistency. 'Follow' should be changed to 'followed'.