Rules— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific examples without redundancy. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and ensure your answer is coherent and concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, my school has several rules to maintain discipline. For example, all students must wear the proper uniform every day. Additionally, there are rules about punctuality and respecting teachers. These rules help create a focused learning environment.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Try to provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and be specific about how more rules can benefit students.

예시: Yes, I believe students would benefit from having more rules because it would help maintain discipline and encourage respect towards teachers and staff. Moreover, clear rules can create a safer and more organised school environment.

제안: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Make sure to complete your sentences and organise your ideas logically. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about the teacher's qualities and teaching style using linking words.

예시: Yes, I had a teacher who did her job very well. She taught Information Technology and was both strict and friendly. Because of her approach, every student felt motivated to work hard. She always ensured that each student understood the lessons clearly.

× Even my school consisted of a lot of rules one of which included proper uniform as every student has to wear proper uniform in the school which.

✓ Even my school has a lot of rules, one of which includes wearing a proper uniform as every student has to wear it in the school.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, causing confusion. The verb 'consisted' is incorrectly used for rules; 'has' is more appropriate. Also, the phrase 'which' at the end is incomplete. The correction breaks the sentence into clearer parts and uses correct verb tense and structure.

× It is because it will help them to maintain discipline and also it will ensure that they are respecting their elders such as teachers and other people in the school and.

✓ It is because it will help them maintain discipline and also ensure that they respect their elders such as teachers and other people in the school.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and.' Also, the phrase 'help them to maintain' can be simplified to 'help them maintain.' The verb 'are respecting' should be in simple present 'respect' to indicate habitual action. The correction completes the sentence and improves clarity.

× Yes, I had a teacher. She taught a class information technology and which stands for it and she is.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher. She teaches an Information Technology class, which stands for IT, and she is...

The original sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly and is incomplete. 'Had' should be 'have' if referring to a current teacher. 'Taught' should be 'teaches' to match present tense. The phrase 'and which stands for it and she is' is incomplete and confusing. The correction adjusts tense and clarifies the sentence structure.

× She was very strict, yet very friendly. She was a She was the kind of teacher every student would love to have. She always made sure that each student worked in.

✓ She is very strict, yet very friendly. She is the kind of teacher every student would love to have. She always makes sure that each student works hard.

The original sentences are inconsistent in tense and incomplete. Switching from past 'was' to present 'is' fits better if the teacher is current. The phrase 'She was a She was' is repetitive and incorrect. The last sentence is incomplete; adding 'works hard' completes the thought. The correction improves tense consistency and sentence completeness.