Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本直接，也提供了购买频率和原因，但存在明显的语法、搭配和代词错误。应将“if I needed new a new ones”改为“if I need a new pair”，将“renew it”改为“replace them”，因为 shoes 是复数；“it's the time”应改为“it's time”。此外，句子较长，可以使用“usually”和“because”组织信息，并避免重复表达“new”。

예시: Not really. I usually buy shoes only when my old pair wears out, which happens about every two years. When I need a new pair, I often order it online because it is convenient.

제안: 回答内容相关，并给出了网购鞋子的优点，但时态不一致、重复和表达不自然。习惯应使用一般现在时“usually buy”，而不是“usually bought”；“with only a click”可改为“with just a few clicks”；“it will soon send it to my home”应改为“they are delivered to my home”。删除句末多余的“Yes”，并用“also”或“so”连接细节，使答案更流畅。

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is cheaper and more convenient. I can compare different styles and prices with just a few clicks. The shoes are usually delivered to my home within a few days.

제안: 回答给出了清晰的价格范围和原因，内容较完整。需要改正“put some shoes”为“buy shoes”，“CN¥200 or above”应明确为“around 200 yuan, but no more than 500 yuan”；“I'll always”不适合描述通常消费，应用“I usually”。“ordinary and cheap shoes”略显生硬，可以说“simple, affordable shoes”。

예시: I usually spend between 200 and 500 yuan on a pair of shoes. I prefer simple and affordable shoes because I am still a student and rely on my parents for money. I think this price range is reasonable for everyday footwear.

제안: 观点明确，也说明了选择舒适鞋子的原因，但句子重复严重，且后半句没有完整表达意思。应将“the most important things for shoes is”改为“the most important thing about shoes is”；“to wear not to see”可改为“how they feel, rather than how they look”。条件句应使用“If I wear...”，结果表达可改为“they may hurt my feet and make it difficult to walk”。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is more important to me than appearance. Even if fashionable shoes look attractive, they are not worth buying if they hurt my feet. Comfortable shoes also allow me to walk around more easily.

× Not really, I just buy shoes if I needed new a new ones.

✓ Not really. I just buy shoes if I need new ones.

这里描述的是一般情况，应使用一般现在时。if 从句中应使用 “need”，不能使用过去式 “needed”。另外，“new ones”已经表示“新的鞋子”，不需要再加 “a”。

× Not really, I just buy shoes if I needed new a new ones.

✓ Not really. I just buy shoes if I need new ones.

“ones”是复数代词，不能和不定冠词 “a” 一起使用。应删除 “a”，表达为 “new ones”。

× For example if I just wear my old shoes for about two years or longer, I think it's the time to renew it so I will buy it online for a new one.

✓ For example, if I wear my old shoes for about two years or longer, I think it's time to replace them, so I will buy a new pair online.

固定表达是 “It’s time to do something”，通常不使用定冠词 “the”。因此应说 “it’s time”，而不是 “it’s the time”。

× For example if I just wear my old shoes for about two years or longer, I think it's the time to renew it so I will buy it online for a new one.

✓ For example, if I wear my old shoes for about two years or longer, I think it's time to replace them, so I will buy a new pair online.

“shoes”是复数名词，所以不能用单数代词 “it”。指代鞋子时应使用复数代词 “them”。“buy it”也应改为 “buy a new pair”，因为这里指的是一双新鞋。

× Yes, I usually bought shoes online because I think it's cheaper and more convenient.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because I think it's cheaper and more convenient.

“usually”表示经常发生的习惯，应使用一般现在时 “buy”，而不是一般过去时 “bought”。

× I can just buy the shoes I like with only a click and it will soon soon send it send it to my my home.

✓ I can just buy the shoes I like with one click, and they will soon send them to my home.

“shoes”是复数，因此指代鞋子时应使用 “they/them”，不能使用单数代词 “it”。这里 “they” 指卖家或商家，“them” 指鞋子。

× For me I think comfortable shoes are better because I think the most important things for shoes is to wear not to see.

✓ For me, I think comfortable shoes are better because I think the most important thing about shoes is wearing them, not looking at them.

“the most important thing”中的中心名词是单数 “thing”，所以应使用单数动词 “is”，不能使用复数形式 “things”与 “is”搭配。

× For me I think comfortable shoes are better because I think the most important things for shoes is to wear not to see.

✓ For me, I think comfortable shoes are better because I think the most important thing about shoes is wearing them, not looking at them.

这里强调的是一个最重要的方面，应使用单数名词 “thing”，而不是复数形式 “things”。

× For me I think comfortable shoes are better because I think the most important things for shoes is to wear not to see.

✓ For me, I think comfortable shoes are better because I think the most important thing about shoes is wearing them, not looking at them.

“wear”和“look at”的宾语都是 shoes。由于 shoes 是复数，应使用宾格代词 “them”，即 “wearing them” 和 “looking at them”。

× So if I I wear fashionable shoes but not but that are not comfortable I think will it will hurt my hurt my hurt my feet and made me not.

✓ So, if I wear fashionable shoes that are not comfortable, I think they will hurt my feet and make me uncomfortable.

原句中出现了重复的主语、连接词和动词，句子结构不完整。应使用清晰的条件句结构：“if + 主语 + 动词”，再接主句 “I think they will...”。

× So if I I wear fashionable shoes but not but that are not comfortable I think will it will hurt my hurt my hurt my feet and made me not.

✓ So, if I wear fashionable shoes that are not comfortable, I think they will hurt my feet and make me uncomfortable.

“fashionable shoes”是复数名词，后文应使用复数代词 “they”作主语，而不是直接使用错误的 “it”。“my feet”也应只保留一次。

× So if I I wear fashionable shoes but not but that are not comfortable I think will it will hurt my hurt my hurt my feet and made me not.

✓ So, if I wear fashionable shoes that are not comfortable, I think they will hurt my feet and make me uncomfortable.

情态动词 “will” 后面必须接动词原形。因此应使用 “will ... make”，不能使用过去式 “made”。