Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本直接，也提供了购买频率和原因，但时态和主谓一致错误较多，例如“when I needed”应改为“when I need”，“the season change”应改为“the seasons change”。“When the season changes, I have to buy new shoes”与前面的“一年买两三双”略显重复，可以补充具体情况，例如鞋子磨损或换季。注意使用连接词使原因更自然。

예시: Not really. I’m not a big fan of buying shoes, so I only get a new pair when I really need one. I usually buy two or three pairs a year, mainly when the seasons change or my old shoes are worn out.

제안: 回答包含了明确观点和购买数量，但表达不完整，最后的“because I think”没有说明原因；“in last year”应改为“last year”，“include”应改为“including”，“slapper”应为“slippers”，“boats”应为“boots”。建议先直接回答，再说明网购的优点，例如选择更多、价格更低，并减少停顿词。

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because there are more choices and the prices are often lower. Last year, I bought three pairs online, including a pair of slippers and two pairs of boots. I also checked the reviews carefully before ordering them.

제안: 回答直接回答了金额，也给出了原因，但“two or three”后面缺少“pairs”，“so I not spend”应改为“so I don’t spend”。“because”和“as I mentioned before”重复解释了相同内容，建议删去一处，并补充每双鞋的大致价格或消费取决于鞋的类型，使内容更具体。

예시: I usually spend less than 1,000 yuan a year on shoes. I only buy two or three pairs, and each pair costs around 300 to 400 yuan. Since I mainly choose practical everyday shoes, I don’t usually spend much on them.

제안: 回答观点明确，并说明了舒适鞋带来的好处，也进行了时尚鞋和舒适鞋的对比。不过“the fashionable shoes easily go viral but easily disappear”不太自然；“go viral”通常用于新闻、视频或话题，不适合描述鞋子。可以改为“fashion trends change quickly”，并使用“while”连接对比，避免重复使用“comfortable shoes”。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they make my daily life easier. When I wear them, I feel relaxed, especially if I have to walk for a long time. Fashionable shoes may look attractive, but trends change quickly, while comfortable shoes are more practical and long-lasting.

× I only buy shoes when I needed one.

✓ I only buy shoes when I need a pair.

“only buy”表示经常性的习惯，因此从句也应使用一般现在时，不能使用过去式“needed”。另外，“shoes”通常成双购买，因此用“a pair”更准确。

× When the season change I had to buy new shoes.

✓ When the season changes, I have to buy new shoes.

主语“the season”是第三人称单数，所以一般现在时的动词“change”要加-s，变成“changes”。

× When the season change I had to buy new shoes.

✓ When the season changes, I have to buy new shoes.

这里描述的是每个季节到来时的习惯，而不是过去某一次发生的事情，所以“had to”应改为一般现在时“have to”。

× In last year I bought about UH3 shoes online include uh one slapper and UH-2 boats because I think.

✓ Last year, I bought about three pairs of shoes online, including one pair of slippers and two pairs of boots.

表示“去年”时，固定表达是“last year”，前面不需要介词“in”。“in last year”是不正确的表达。

× In last year I bought about UH3 shoes online include uh one slapper and UH-2 boats because I think.

✓ Last year, I bought about three pairs of shoes online, including one pair of slippers and two pairs of boots.

鞋通常按“pair”来计数，因此应说“three pairs of shoes”，而不是“three shoes”。后面的数量也应保持一致，使用“one pair”和“two pairs”。

× In last year I bought about UH3 shoes online include uh one slapper and UH-2 boats because I think.

✓ Last year, I bought about three pairs of shoes online, including one pair of slippers and two pairs of boots.

“including”用于补充说明前面买了哪些鞋。这里不能直接使用动词原形“include”，因为它需要使用现在分词形式连接补充信息。

× In last year I bought about UH3 shoes online include uh one slapper and UH-2 boats because I think.

✓ Last year, I bought about three pairs of shoes online, including one pair of slippers and two pairs of boots.

句末的“because I think”没有完整的后续内容，形成不完整的从句，会使句子结构不完整。删除这个没有完成的从句后，句子结构完整、意思清楚。

× I only buy shoes about two or three per year.

✓ I only buy about two or three pairs of shoes per year.

“two or three”后面需要明确说明数量单位。因为这里谈论的是鞋，应使用可数单位“pairs”，所以要说“two or three pairs of shoes”。

× So I not spend much money on shoes.

✓ So I do not spend much money on shoes.

一般现在时的否定句需要使用助动词“do”，因此不能说“I not spend”，应说“I do not spend”或“I don’t spend”。

× The fashionable shoes easily go viral but easily disappear.

✓ Fashionable shoes easily go viral but easily disappear.

这里是在泛指时尚鞋，而不是指某一双特定的鞋。复数名词表示泛指时通常不使用定冠词“the”，所以应删除“The”。