Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
수험생
I love to buy shoes certainly. I buy them once a week. Personal preferences might differ from person to person, but the shoes that I most prefer is definitely the formal shoes. They make me look taller than before. That's the best reason I like it.
시험관
Have you ever bought shoes online?
수험생
To be honest, I bought almost all shoes in online. As a matter of fact purchasing things in online is much more convenient than buying in stores. What's more, it's substantially cheaper than buying in stores.
시험관
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
수험생
It depends on my economical situation, but I usually spend around five hundred dollars to buy shoes. If shoes are more than five hundred dollars, I couldn't afford them because I'm not as wealthy as Bill Gates.
시험관
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
수험생
I absolutely prefer fashionable shoes because I'm a person who prefer formal shoes. However, I often purchase comfortable shoes because I can't wear fashionable shoes when I work out. In addition, I sometimes wear comfortable shoes when I go camping.
평가
총점
Part 1
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
점수: 75.0제안: 주제와 빈도를 직접 제시한 점은 좋지만, “I love to buy shoes certainly”는 어색하므로 “I really enjoy buying shoes”처럼 자연스럽게 표현하세요. “the shoes that I most prefer is”는 문법적으로 부정확하므로 “I prefer formal shoes the most”라고 말하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한 “once a week”는 매우 잦은 빈도이므로, 실제 이유나 구매 상황을 구체적으로 덧붙이면 답변이 더 설득력 있어집니다. 마지막 문장의 “like it”은 신발을 가리키므로 “like them”으로 수정하세요.
예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy a new pair once a month. I prefer formal shoes because they make me look taller and more professional. I normally buy them when I have an important meeting or a special occasion.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
점수: 78.0제안: 온라인 구매 경험과 장점을 명확하게 제시했지만, “in online”은 “online” 또는 “on the internet”으로 고쳐야 합니다. 또한 현재까지의 경험을 말하므로 “I have bought almost all my shoes online”처럼 현재완료를 사용하는 것이 적절합니다. “purchasing things in online”은 “shopping online”으로 간결하게 표현하고, 편리함이나 저렴함을 보여 주는 구체적인 이유를 하나 추가하면 더 효과적입니다.
예시: Yes, I have bought almost all my shoes online. Shopping online is more convenient because I can compare different brands and prices from home. It is also usually cheaper than shopping in stores, although I sometimes worry about getting the wrong size.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
점수: 72.0제안: 지출 금액을 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “economical situation”보다는 개인의 재정 상태를 의미하는 “financial situation”이 자연스럽습니다. 일반적인 습관을 말할 때 “If shoes are more than five hundred dollars, I couldn't afford them”보다는 “I wouldn't be able to afford them”이 적절합니다. 또한 500달러는 상당히 큰 금액이므로 어떤 종류의 신발에 그 정도를 쓰는지 구체적으로 설명하면 내용이 더 자연스러워집니다. “Bill Gates”에 대한 농담은 이해되지만, Part 1에서는 조금 더 현실적인 표현이 효과적입니다.
예시: It depends on my financial situation, but I usually spend around 100 to 150 dollars on a pair of shoes. I might spend more on high-quality formal shoes because I wear them for work. However, I would not pay more than 500 dollars, as that would be beyond my budget.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
점수: 82.0제안: 선호를 먼저 밝히고 운동과 캠핑이라는 구체적인 예를 제시해 구조가 가장 좋습니다. 다만 “a person who prefer”는 주어가 단수이므로 “a person who prefers”로 수정해야 합니다. “I can't wear fashionable shoes when I work out”은 모든 유행 신발을 신을 수 없다는 의미가 될 수 있으므로 “fashionable formal shoes are not practical for working out”처럼 더 정확하게 표현하세요. 패션을 선호하는 이유와 편안한 신발이 필요한 상황을 연결하면 답변의 논리성이 더욱 향상됩니다.
예시: I generally prefer fashionable shoes because I enjoy wearing formal shoes and they make me look more stylish. However, comfortable shoes are more practical for exercise and outdoor activities. For example, I always wear comfortable sneakers when I work out or go camping.
문법
× I love to buy shoes certainly.
✓ I certainly love to buy shoes.
The adverb certainly is placed unnaturally at the end of the sentence. Place it before the main verb to make the sentence sound natural.
× The shoes that I most prefer is definitely the formal shoes.
✓ The shoes that I most prefer are definitely formal shoes.
The subject shoes is plural, so it must take the plural verb are, not is. Also, formal shoes is being used in a general sense, so the definite article the is unnecessary.
× That's the best reason I like it.
✓ That's the best reason I like them.
The pronoun it refers to a singular noun, but shoes is plural. Use the plural object pronoun them.
× To be honest, I bought almost all shoes in online.
✓ To be honest, I bought almost all my shoes online.
Online is used as an adverb in this sentence, so it should not be preceded by the preposition in. Adding my also makes the intended meaning more precise.
× As a matter of fact purchasing things in online is much more convenient than buying in stores.
✓ As a matter of fact, purchasing things online is much more convenient than buying them in stores.
The word online does not take the preposition in when it describes where an activity happens. The object them makes the comparison with purchasing things clearer.
× It depends on my economical situation, but I usually spend around five hundred dollars to buy shoes.
✓ It depends on my economic situation, but I usually spend around five hundred dollars to buy shoes.
Economic means related to finances or the economy. Economical usually means using money or resources carefully, so economic is the appropriate adjective here.
× If shoes are more than five hundred dollars, I couldn't afford them because I'm not as wealthy as Bill Gates.
✓ If shoes are more than five hundred dollars, I can't afford them because I'm not as wealthy as Bill Gates.
This sentence describes a general present situation, so use the present modal can or cannot. Couldn't refers to past inability or a more hypothetical situation, which does not fit this context.
× I'm a person who prefer formal shoes.
✓ I'm a person who prefers formal shoes.
The relative pronoun who refers to the singular noun person. Therefore, the verb in the relative clause needs the third-person singular ending -s: prefers.
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