Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ понятный, но есть ошибки в грамматике и словосочетаниях. Старайтесь: 1) формулировать короткое топик‑предложение; 2) избегать лишних слов и повторов; 3) исправить порядок слов и согласование (например, «natural leather shoes which I can wear for a long time»). Добавьте связку для логичности: «so», «because» или «therefore».

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually get something new every season. I update my wardrobe to keep my style fresh, so I often choose comfortable natural leather shoes because I can wear them for a long time.

제안: Ответ краткий и по существу, но содержит ошибки в временах и фразах. Улучшите связные слова и временную форму: используйте Present Perfect для опыта («I have bought»). Уточните причину и добавьте пример, чтобы сделать ответ более конкретным.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is convenient when I do not have time to visit shops. For example, I recently ordered boots that arrived within a week and fit perfectly.

제안: Ответ содержит неправильные числа и временные/словосочетательные ошибки. Следует: 1) исправить структуру предложения; 2) использовать корректные единицы (euro → euros); 3) указать реальные диапазоны цен, а не «years». Дайте чёткое сравнение и используйте связки: «If… then…; otherwise…».

예시: It depends. If I buy shoes from a new collection, I usually spend about one hundred euros. If I buy second‑hand shoes, I typically pay between five and twenty euros.

제안: Идея выражена ясно, но есть ошибки в словоупотреблении и грамматике. Улучшите форму (например, «I like walking»), поясните причину более подробно и добавьте пример ситуации. Используйте связки: «because», «so», «for example».

예시: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot during the day. For example, I choose supportive sneakers for city trips so my feet do not hurt after long walks.

× I prefer comfortable natural leather shoes which shoe I can wear for a long time.

✓ I prefer comfortable natural leather shoes that I can wear for a long time.

The original sentence uses an incorrect relative clause 'which shoe I can wear' that breaks sentence structure. Use the relative pronoun 'that' (or 'which' without repeating 'shoe') followed by the subject and verb: 'shoes that I can wear'. This fixes word order and makes the clause grammatically correct.

× Yes many times I bought shoes online and it's a good option when I can't visit anymore or have no time for shopping outside.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online many times, and it's a good option when I can't go out anymore or don't have time for shopping.

The student mixes past simple with a present time reference. Use present perfect 'have bought' for experiences up to now. Also add commas for clarity and change 'visit' to 'go out' and 'have no time' to 'don't have time' for natural phrasing. This corrects tense usage and sentence structure.

× If I buy brand new shoes from new collection, I usually spend about hundred euro and if I buy it from second hand, so I can pay only from five to twenty years.

✓ If I buy brand-new shoes from a new collection, I usually spend about a hundred euros, and if I buy them second-hand, I can pay only from five to twenty euros.

Several errors: add hyphen in 'brand-new', use the article 'a' before 'new collection', use 'a hundred euros' (include article and plural 'euros'), and use 'them' (plural pronoun) instead of 'it'. 'Second-hand' should be used as adjective before noun or 'buy them second-hand'. Also 'years' is incorrect for price; use 'euros'. This fixes articles, plural agreement, pronouns, and correct unit words.

× Definitely I prefer comfortable shoes. I like to walking more so it's a very important position for me.

✓ Definitely I prefer comfortable shoes. I like walking more, so it's very important to me.

Use the gerund 'walking' after 'like' rather than the infinitive 'to walking'. Also 'position' is incorrect in this context: use 'important to me'. Insert a comma before 'so' for clarity. This corrects verb form and word choice.