Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give two brief specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (e.g., "I have three pairs of shoes"). Aim for 2–4 sentences, use linking words like "because" and "for example," and use correct nouns (pairs, running shoes).

예시: I don't buy shoes very often. I only own three pairs because each serves a specific purpose: one for running, one for work, and one for home tasks like cleaning and showering.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then give clear reasons with specific examples. Correct common mistakes (e.g., "Yes, I have" not "Yes I should"). Mention specific sites and reasons briefly and avoid repetition. Use linking phrases like "for example" and "because."

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online, for example from Amazon and Shopee. I usually avoid brand websites like Adidas because they rarely offer discounts or gift cards, so I prefer marketplaces with better deals.

제안: Give a clear, correctly phrased amount and explain briefly if needed. Use correct currency names and conversions and avoid unclear words. Keep it to one or two concise sentences. If unsure about exact conversion, say "around".

예시: I usually spend at most 80 reais, which is roughly 30 US dollars. I prefer to buy affordable shoes rather than expensive brands.

제안: Start with a clear preference sentence and give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "so." Correct word choices (fashionable, comfortable

× Not that often actually.

✓ Not that often, actually.

Add a comma for natural pause and clarity; this is a punctuation/structure adjustment to make the spoken response read more naturally.

× I don't like to wear a lot of shoes because I have I have like three shoes that all need to do all I need to do one for running second for comforting, like going to office or my working place.

✓ I don't like to buy many shoes because I have about three pairs: one for running, one for comfort when going to the office or my workplace, and one for daily use at home.

Errors: incorrect word choice and structure, repetition, and wrong noun forms ('shoes' vs 'pairs'). Use 'buy' instead of 'wear' (context) and 'pairs' for count. List items clearly using commas and conjunctions. Use 'workplace' instead of 'my working place'. Improve parallel structure and remove repetition.

× And third, maybe for my daily uses in my house, like cleaning, going to the shower and so on.

✓ Third, maybe for daily use at home, such as cleaning or showering.

Use 'daily use' not 'daily uses', and 'at home' rather than 'in my house' for conciseness; 'going to the shower' is unnatural—use 'showering'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× Yes I should I bought plenty of shoes online one from Amazon, one and other one from Shoppee.

✓ Yes, I have bought many shoes online: some from Amazon and others from Shopee.

Use present perfect 'have bought' to indicate experience; 'plenty' is informal—'many' fits better. Correct name 'Shopee'. Use a colon or commas to list examples and correct plural forms.

× I don't buy from a famous shopping website like Adidas St. Nike because they don't give a lot of lot of offers in their shoes like discounts or maybe a gift gift card.

✓ I don't buy from popular brand websites like Adidas or Nike because they often do not offer many discounts or gift cards.

Fix conjunctions and brand naming: use 'or' between brands, remove repeated words ('lot of lot of', 'gift gift'), and use 'popular brand websites' for clarity. Use 'do not offer many discounts' rather than awkward phrasing.

× So this is why I don't like to buy from them.

✓ So that's why I don't like buying from them.

Use 'buying' gerund to match common spoken English and contraction 'that's' for naturalness. No change in meaning.

× I usually spend at most eighty reality which is approximately thirty dollars in thirty American dollar And down.

✓ I usually spend at most eighty reais, which is approximately thirty US dollars or less.

Correct the currency name 'reais' (Brazilian currency) and pluralize 'dollars'. Use 'US dollars' for clarity and 'or less' to express upper limit. Remove redundant words.

× In my point of view, I actually shoe as comfortable clothes because fashion is not that very important to my lifestyle actually.

✓ In my point of view, I prefer comfortable shoes because fashion is not very important to my lifestyle.

Replace incorrect words: 'shoe as comfortable clothes' is ungrammatical—use 'prefer comfortable shoes'. Remove redundant 'actually' and 'that very'. Use 'prefer' to express preference.

× I usually go to my to my working place in my office and sometimes I actually go with my friends to the market or the mall.

✓ I usually go to my office for work, and sometimes I go with friends to the market or the mall.

Simplify repetition ('to my to my'), use 'office' without 'working place', and remove unnecessary 'actually'. Maintain parallel structure.

× Fag is not very important to me, so I actually had a comfortable clothes, a comfortable shoes.

✓ Fashion is not very important to me, so I prefer comfortable clothes and comfortable shoes.

Fix typo 'Fag' to 'Fashion'. Use present tense 'prefer' instead of 'had'. Use plural nouns 'clothes' and 'shoes' and parallel structure. Remove unnecessary 'actually'.