Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant and coherent with appropriate supporting details. To improve, make the topic sentence slightly more natural and avoid repeating 'I' at start of each sentence; use one linking phrase to connect frequency and reasons. Also keep within 3–4 sentences maximum and vary vocabulary (e.g., "occasion" -> "events").

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and typically purchase two or three pairs a year depending on my needs. For instance, I buy smart shoes for formal events like meetings or graduations, while I get comfortable trainers for daily exercise and walking.

제안: The answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors, irrelevant phrases and repetition. Focus on a concise, structured response: state whether you have bought online, give one clear detail about the experience (e.g., sizing or selection), and conclude with a short comment about convenience or problems. Use correct verb forms and avoid unrelated fragments like 'enormous amounts' without context.

예시: Yes, I recently bought a pair of shoes online. The selection was great, but the size I ordered turned out to be too large, so I had to return them. Overall, buying online is convenient, but you must check size charts carefully.

제안: Good start but the answer is incomplete and has minor errors (currency formatting, incomplete final sentence). Give a clear range for casual shoes and use linking words to compare. Be specific and finish your thought.

예시: It depends on the type of shoe. For specialized sports shoes I usually spend about $50 to $100 because they need extra support and cushioning, whereas for casual shoes I typically spend under $40.

제안: The main idea is clear, but there are several errors and odd phrases (e.g., 'patient insurance', 'Then I can read for long periods'), hesitations and unnecessary fillers. State your preference clearly, give two concise reasons linked with connecting words, and avoid unrelated or confusing expressions. Use precise vocabulary like 'stylish' instead of 'patient insurance'.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet all day and supportive footwear helps prevent foot pain. Although stylish shoes can look nice, I usually choose practical designs so I can stay comfortable for long periods.

× Oh, recently I bought a pair of shoes via online and it is the big size which can offer us enormous amounts of products you can buy online and the payment options are quite wary.

✓ Oh, recently I bought a pair of shoes online, and they were too big; there are enormous numbers of products you can buy online, and the payment options can be quite varied.

Use 'online' without 'via' for buying on the internet; 'a pair of shoes' is plural in meaning so follow with plural pronoun 'they'; 'it is the big size' is ungrammatical—use 'they were too big' or 'they were the wrong size'; 'enormous amounts of products' is wrong collocation: use 'enormous numbers of products' or 'a huge variety of products'; 'wary' is incorrect word choice—use 'varied' or 'uncertain' depending on meaning. Suggestion: say short clear sentences: 'I bought a pair of shoes online. They were too big. There is a huge variety of products and the payment options vary.'

× Hmm it depends on the type of shoes.

✓ Hmm, it depends on the type of shoes.

Sentence missing a comma after interjection 'Hmm' for natural spoken punctuation; grammatically the clause is correct present tense 'depends'. No tense change needed. Suggestion: include comma for clarity and natural pause in speech: 'Hmm, it depends on the type of shoes.'

× For specialized sports like running or basketball I usually spend about 50 to $100 because they need extra supporting and cushioning.

✓ For specialized sports like running or basketball I usually spend about $50 to $100 because they need extra support and cushioning.

Use 'support' (noun) rather than 'supporting' (present participle) in this context; include currency symbol before first number ('$50') and use consistent numeric format. Suggestion: use 'support and cushioning' when describing shoe features.

× But for casual I usually spend under.

✓ But for casual shoes I usually spend less.

Original sentence is incomplete: 'under' needs an object or amount (under what?). Use 'less' to compare cost without specifying exact amount, or specify an amount (for example, 'under $50'). Suggestion: complete the thought: 'But for casual shoes I usually spend less' or 'But for casual shoes I usually spend under $50.'

× Although patient insurance can look nice, I usually choose practical styles.

✓ Although fashionable shoes can look nice, I usually choose practical styles.

'Patient insurance' is nonsensical in this context—likely a mispronunciation of 'fashionable' or 'pretty'. Replace with 'fashionable shoes' or 'fashionable styles' to make sense. Suggestion: choose words that match meaning; here use 'fashionable shoes'.

× Then I can read for long periods.

✓ Then I can stand or walk for long periods without discomfort.

Original sentence 'Then I can read for long periods' does not logically follow discussion about shoes; likely intended to say they can 'stand' or 'walk' for long periods. This is a content mismatch rather than strict grammar, but correcting pronoun/verb choice yields coherent meaning. Suggestion: use verbs that fit context: 'stand' or 'walk' when talking about footwear comfort.