Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and smoother linking words to improve coherence. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g., I prefer buying).

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, though less than before. Two years ago I bought new shoes about once a month, usually leather because I value comfort and durability. As a result, most of my shoes are fairly expensive but last a long time.

제안: Start with a clear confirmation, then give one specific example with chronological linking words. Correct sentence structure and verb forms (e.g., I had to return the pair) and avoid redundant words. Mention result or lesson briefly.

예시: Yes, I have. For example, I bought a pair of gym shoes online a few months ago, but the quality was poor, so I had to return them. Since then, I check reviews and return policies before buying shoes online.

제안: Give a concise direct answer with correct grammar and clearer figures, then support with a reason. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and avoid mixed singular/plural errors.

예시: I usually spend about 20% of my monthly salary on shoes because I prefer high-quality pairs that are comfortable. Therefore, although they are not cheap, I feel the expense is worthwhile.

제안: Answer directly, then give specific contrasting examples with correct vocabulary (e.g., flip-flops, sandals, sneakers). Use linking words like for instance or however to make reasons clear and correct verb forms (I prefer wearing).

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes. For instance, I hardly wear my high heels, so they still look new; instead I usually wear leather sneakers, flip-flops, or supportive gym shoes because they are practical for daily use.

× I used to like buying shoes.

✓ I used to like buying shoes.

Sentence is correct: 'used to' expresses past habit; no change needed.

× For example, two years ago I bought new shoes once a month I prefer buy I prefer buying shoes made of leather and I value the quality and confidence.

✓ For example, two years ago I bought new shoes once a month. I prefer buying shoes made of leather because I value quality and the confidence they give me.

Original contains run-on sentence and mixed tenses. Split into two sentences and use consistent verb forms: 'bought' for past habit and 'prefer buying' for present preference. Use 'because' to link reasons and add 'they give me' to clarify 'confidence'. Remove 'buy' duplicate.

× So most of my shoes were expensive.

✓ So most of my shoes were expensive.

Sentence is grammatically correct: 'most of my shoes' (plural) matches 'were'. No change needed.

× Yes, I have for example I bought a pair of gym shoes online just several months ago but the experience was very terrible because the quality is awful.

✓ Yes. For example, I bought a pair of gym shoes online several months ago, but the experience was terrible because the quality was awful.

Avoid mixing 'I have' with a finished time expression 'several months ago'. Use simple past 'bought' and past 'was' to refer to that experience. Remove unnecessary 'very' before 'terrible'.

× I have had the two return the gym the pair the shoes.

✓ I had to return the pair of gym shoes.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. Use 'had to' to express obligation in past and correct word order: 'return the pair of gym shoes'.

× I usually spend twenty percent monthly salary to buy new shoes

✓ I usually spend twenty percent of my monthly salary on new shoes.

Missing 'of' after percent and missing preposition 'on' for expenditure. Include 'my' to specify possession.

× My shoes is most of my shoes are not cheap, but I think it's worth because we felt very comfortable when I wear them.

✓ Most of my shoes are not cheap, but I think it's worth it because they feel very comfortable when I wear them.

Original repeats subject and mixes singular/plural and pronouns. Use 'Most of my shoes are' (plural) and 'they feel' to refer to shoes. Use 'worth it' as correct idiom. Use present tense 'feel' and 'wear' for general statements.

× For example, I have several pair of high heels but they look still brand new because I wear them very seldom.

✓ For example, I have several pairs of high heels, but they still look brand new because I wear them very seldom.

Use plural 'pairs' not 'pair'. Place 'still' before 'look' for natural word order.

× I prefer wear gym shoes and flip flaps or sunshoes made of leather.

✓ I prefer wearing gym shoes and flip-flops or sandals made of leather.

After 'prefer' use the gerund 'wearing'. 'Flip flaps' is incorrect; use 'flip-flops'. 'Sunshoes' is not standard; use 'sandals' if referring to open shoes. Ensure parallel items and correct spelling.