Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは直接的で簡潔ですが、文法と語順の誤り、曖昧な表現（"editors usually wear the editors" など）があり、情報の一貫性が欠けています。改善点：1) トピック文を明確にし、頻度は短く正確に述べる。2) ブランドの好みを説明する際は理由を付け加える。3) 不要な繰り返しや意味不明な語句を除く。使える表現例や接続詞（because / so / also）で文をつなぐ練習をしましょう。

예시: Yes, I like buying shoes, and I usually buy them twice a year. I prefer Nike because their shoes are comfortable and durable, so they last a long time.

제안: 回答は理由を述べており基本構成は良いですが、語法と語順の誤りが多く、表現が不自然です。改善点：1) 否定と理由を簡潔に結びつける（I have never... because...）。2) サイズについて話すときは具体的な問題点を挙げる（e.g. sizes vary between brands）。3) 最後の文は現在の行動を明確に述べる（e.g. I prefer to buy shoes in person so I can try them on）。

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because sizes often vary between brands, so I can't be sure they will fit. Therefore, I prefer to buy shoes in store where I can try them on.

제안: 金額の表現と時制の混乱、繰り返しが目立ちます。改善点：1) 数字は明確に（and include currency if needed）。2) 過去と現在を分けて説明する（When I was... vs Now...）。3) 文を2〜3文にまとめ、理由や変化の説明を加える。

예시: I usually spend about 20,000 won on a pair of shoes now. When I was in high school, I sometimes spent up to 110,000 won, but as a college student I tend to spend less because I need to save money.

제안: 答えは好みを述べているものの、文法的に不正確で意味が不明瞭な部分が多いです。改善点：1) トピック文で好みを明確に述べる（I prefer ... because ...）。2) 理由は簡潔に一つか二つ、具体例を使って説明する。3) 不要な問いかけや繰り返しを避ける。

예시: I prefer fashionable shoes because I enjoy following trends and they help me feel confident in social situations. For example, I often choose stylish sneakers that match my outfits when I go out with friends.

× Yes, I enjoy buying shoes.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence correctly uses the present simple to describe a habitual preference.

× I buy the shoes twice a year.

✓ I buy shoes twice a year.

Definite article 'the' is unnecessary before a general plural noun. Use no article for general statements about plural countable nouns. Suggestion: remove 'the' when speaking about shoes in general.

× Especially I like Nike and editors usually wear the editors and NIKE.

✓ I especially like Nike, and many editors usually wear Nike.

Sentence has unclear pronoun 'the editors' and repeated nouns causing confusion. Use a clear subject 'many editors' and avoid repeating brand names with definite article. Also place adverb 'especially' before the verb for natural word order.

× No, I never bought shoes online because by online I can't what I can't understand the shoe size.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I can't understand the shoe sizes online.

Use present perfect 'have never bought' to describe experience up to now. 'By online' is incorrect preposition; use 'online' adverbially. Word order was incorrect; 'can't understand the shoe sizes online' is natural.

× So when I want to buy the shoes, I try wearing the new one.

✓ So when I want to buy shoes, I try on a new pair.

Use the phrasal verb 'try on' for clothing/shoes. 'Try wearing' is unnatural in this context. Use 'a new pair' for shoes and omit 'the' for general reference.

× I usually spend twenty thousand on shoes when I I was a high school student I spent up to one ten thousand, but now I am a college student.

✓ I usually spend twenty thousand on shoes. When I was a high school student, I spent up to ten thousand, but now I am a college student.

Run-on sentence needs splitting. Use past tense 'was' for the high school period and past tense 'spent' correctly. 'One ten thousand' is incorrect; use 'ten thousand'. Add commas and separate sentences for clarity.

× I spend twenty thousand.

✓ I spend twenty thousand now.

Add 'now' to clarify present habitual spending. The verb form is acceptable but adding a time marker improves clarity.

× I prefer fashionable shoes because I prefer my favorite hobby is shoes and fashionable cross So I'm careful for around people.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because my favorite hobby is collecting shoes and following fashion trends, so I'm careful about how I appear around people.

Original sentence repeats 'prefer' and mixes structures. Use a noun phrase 'my favorite hobby is collecting shoes' and 'following fashion trends' for clarity. 'Careful for around people' is incorrect preposition; use 'careful about how I appear around people.'

× What do you mean? What do you look? Me? Me? Me

✓ What do you mean? What are you looking at? Me?

The student attempted to ask 'What are you looking at?' Use present continuous 'are you looking' with preposition 'at'. Repetitive 'Me? Me? Me' can be reduced to a single 'Me?' for natural speech.