Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法や語彙の誤りが多く、意味が取りにくい箇所があります。まずは簡潔なトピック文を作り（I don't really enjoy buying shoes.）、その後で理由を一つか二つ具体的に述べましょう。語順や単数・複数、比較の表現（larger than → larger than fashionable ones は不自然）を正しく使い、不要な語を減らしてください。接続語（because, so）を使って論理的に繋げると自然に聞こえます。練習ポイント：1) 単純で正確な言い回しを優先する。2) 「いつ買うか」を明確に述べる（e.g. when my old shoes wear out）。3) 1〜2文で終える。

예시: I don't really enjoy buying shoes. I prefer simple black shoes that are comfortable rather than trendy ones, so I only buy new shoes when my old ones wear out.

제안: 回答は明確で理由も述べていますが、文法と表現の自然さを改善する必要があります。特に動詞の形（see if it comfortably → see if they are comfortable）や名詞・代名詞の一致（size or tie on it → size or try them on）が問題です。接続詞の使い方は良いので、語彙を正確にして一つか二つ具体例（例えば返品ポリシーや試着の利点）を付け加えると良いです。練習ポイント：1) 正しいフレーズ “try them on” を使う。2) 理由を一つ短く具体的に述べる。

예시: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I'm not confident about the sizing. I prefer shopping in store where I can try them on and make sure they fit properly.

제안: 答えは大まかに伝わりますが、“dwell”という単語の誤用や接続が不自然です。金額を出した後、なぜ安く済むのか具体的に説明すると良いです（例えば耐久性や使い方）。また、文を二つに分けて短く明確にすると自然に聞こえます。練習ポイント：1) 適切な形容詞を使う（durable, practical）。2) 簡潔な構成（主文＋理由）。

예시: I usually spend less than five thousand yen on shoes. I prefer durable and practical styles, so I don't need to replace them very often.

제안: 意図は明確ですが、文法ミス（makes → make）、語彙の不自然さ（fastenerable は不適切）や曖昧な表現があります。比較や具体的な理由（walking long distances, foot pain avoided）を繋げる接続語を使い、最後に一例を加えると説得力が増します。言い換え表現を練習して、“shoes with laces/zipper”など正しい語を使ってください。練習ポイント：1) 主語と動詞の一致に注意。2) 正しい語彙（lace-up shoes, slip-ons）を使う。3) 1〜2文で簡潔に説明。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and they help me avoid foot fatigue. For example, I choose lace-up sneakers that have good cushioning rather than fashionable high heels.

× I don't enjoy buying shoes because I like black deco and comfortable shoes large than fashionable ones.

✓ I don't enjoy buying shoes because I like black, decorative, and comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones.

The sentence misuses adjectives and comparative structure. 'deco' is incorrect form; use 'decorative' or 'decorated'. 'large than' is wrong for comparison; use 'rather than' or 'more than'. Also separate adjectives with commas and keep correct order. Suggestion: list adjectives properly and use 'rather than' to contrast choices.

× I often go to shops for buying shoes when old peers wear us out

✓ I often go to shops to buy shoes when my old pairs wear out

Errors: 'for buying' is non-idiomatic; use 'to buy'. 'peers' is wrong word for 'pairs' and 'us' should be 'out' for wear out but needs object 'pairs'. Also 'old pairs' refers to shoes, so use 'my old pairs'. Suggestion: use infinitive 'to buy' and correct nouns: 'pairs' not 'peers', and include possessive 'my'.

× I haven't bought shoes online because I'm not sure I can check the size or tie on it to see if it comfortably.

✓ I haven't bought shoes online because I'm not sure I can check the size or try them on to see if they are comfortable.

Multiple issues: 'tie on' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'try them on'. 'it' should be 'them' for plural 'shoes'. 'comfortably' is adverb but need adjective 'comfortable'. Suggestion: use 'try on' for fitting clothes/shoes, match plural pronoun 'them', and use adjective after 'are'.

× So I prefer buying in shop because I can check

✓ So I prefer buying in shops because I can check them

'in shop' is unidiomatic; use plural 'in shops' or 'in a shop'. Also sentence is incomplete; add object 'them' to indicate what is checked. Suggestion: include correct article or plural and complete thought by specifying object.

× I usually spend less than five thousand yen on buying shoes because I like dwell and practical ones therefore I don't need to buy new ones very often.

✓ I usually spend less than five thousand yen on shoes because I like durable and practical ones, so I don't need to buy new ones very often.

'on buying shoes' is wordy; 'on shoes' is preferable. 'dwell' is wrong word; use 'durable'. Missing conjunction punctuation: use 'so' instead of 'therefore' without comma. Suggestion: replace incorrect word 'dwell' with 'durable', simplify phrase, and add comma plus coordinating conjunction.

× Of course I prefer comfortable ones because I usually walk a lot so comfortable ones makes me avoid fatigue.

✓ Of course I prefer comfortable ones because I usually walk a lot, so comfortable ones help me avoid fatigue.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'comfortable ones makes' should be 'comfortable ones make' or better 'help me'. 'avoid fatigue' is fine but 'help me avoid fatigue' is more natural. Suggestion: use plural verb 'make' with plural subject or use 'help' for natural phrasing and add comma before 'so'.

× Also fastenerable shoes can be or uncomfortable.

✓ Also, shoes with fasteners can be uncomfortable.

'fastenerable' is not a word; use 'shoes with fasteners' or 'lace-up shoes' depending on meaning. 'can be or uncomfortable' is malformed; remove 'or'. Suggestion: use established adjective phrases and remove extraneous words to form clear statement.