Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct verb/noun agreement (e.g., "my favorite thing is buying shoes"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love buying shoes and I usually shop for them around three times a month. I prefer shoes that are both comfortable and fashionable because I care about my appearance and want to feel confident. Overall, buying shoes is a hobby that helps me express my style.

제안: Provide a clearer, structured answer with specific reasons and fewer hesitations. Begin with a direct statement, then explain why you buy online with a specific example (e.g., lack of shops, wider selection). Avoid filler words and repeated phrases. Use linking words such as "because" and "so" for coherence.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because Nottingham doesn't have many shoe stores, so I can find a wider selection on websites. For example, I usually search for luxury brands and limited-edition models that aren't available locally.

제안: Give a clearer estimate and justify your spending with specific reasons. Start with a direct statement of a typical price range, then explain why you might spend more on particular pairs. Avoid contradictions and hesitations; use one or two linking words like "however" or "because."

예시: I usually spend between £50 and £150 on a pair of shoes, but I don't mind paying more for something I really like. For instance, if a pair costs £300 and is extremely comfortable and well-made, I would buy it because it would last longer.

제안: Answer directly and provide a brief reason and a contrast with the past using clear linking words. Begin with your preference, then explain how your priorities changed with age, giving a concise example. Avoid filler sounds and incomplete sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I'm more focused on practicality at my age. When I was younger I chose fashionable shoes to stand out, but now I value comfort for daily use, especially for work and walking.

× Yeah, my favorite things is buy shoes and I usually buy it about three times of a month.

✓ Yeah, my favorite thing is buying shoes and I usually buy them about three times a month.

Problems: 'things' should be singular 'thing' to agree with 'favorite'; 'is buy' should be 'is buying' or use gerund; 'it' refers to plural 'shoes' so use 'them'; 'three times of a month' is non-idiomatic — use 'three times a month'. Suggestion: Use the gerund after 'favorite thing is' and ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents. Use: 'My favorite thing is buying shoes' and 'I usually buy them about three times a month.'

× And I like to buy the comfortable and fashionable shoes.

✓ And I like to buy comfortable and fashionable shoes.

Problem: Definite article 'the' is unnecessary before general plural nouns here. Suggestion: Omit 'the' when speaking about shoes in general: 'comfortable and fashionable shoes.'

× It's it's very it's very important for me because I care my appearance and and.

✓ It's very important to me because I care about my appearance.

Problems: Repetition 'It's it's very it's very' is disfluent; 'care my appearance' requires preposition 'about' and possessive 'my appearance'. Suggestion: Use 'important to me' and 'care about my appearance.'

× Yes, I usually buy shoes from online because I live in Nottingham and there is no a lot of shoe, uh, shoe shoe shops and I usually like, I usually prefer to buy luxury shoes and, uh, some big board, big board and.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because I live in Nottingham and there are not a lot of shoe shops, and I usually prefer to buy luxury shoes and some big-brand ones.

Problems: 'buy shoes from online' should be 'buy shoes online'; 'there is no a lot of shoe shops' — subject-verb agreement and word order: use 'there are not a lot of shoe shops' or better 'there aren't many shoe shops'; 'big board' unclear — likely 'big-brand'; pronoun/reference missing: 'ones' for shoes. Suggestion: Use 'buy online', 'there aren't many...', and 'big-brand ones' for clarity and correct agreement.

× I usually buy shoes from online because I live in Nottingham and there is no a lot of shoe, uh, shoe shoe shops and I usually like, I usually prefer to buy luxury shoes and, uh, some big board, big board and.

✓ Yes, I usually buy shoes online because I live in Nottingham and there aren't many shoe shops, and I usually prefer to buy luxury shoes and some big-brand ones.

Problem: 'there is' should be 'there are' to agree with plural 'a lot of shoe shops'; also 'a lot of shoe' word order is wrong — use 'a lot of shoe shops' or 'many shoe shops'. Suggestion: Ensure 'there are' for plural nouns and correct noun phrases.

× Umm, actually, uh, I didn't know exactly how much, but I know if I if I liked it, although it 1000 lbs and still we buy it.

✓ Umm, actually, I don't know exactly how much, but I know if I like it, even if it's 1000 lbs I would still buy it.

Problems: Tense inconsistency: 'didn't know' should be present 'don't know' because speaking now; 'if I liked it' should be present subjunctive 'if I like it' for general truth; 'although it 1000 lbs' missing verb and wrong conjunction — use 'even if it's 1000 lbs'; 'we buy it' should be 'I would still buy it' to match conditional. Suggestion: Use present tense for general statements and conditional 'would' for hypothetical purchases.

× Well, it's an 100 lbs but it's comfortable with F fashionable.

✓ Well, it's 100 lbs but it's comfortable and fashionable.

Problems: Article 'an' before a number is wrong; 'with F fashionable' is unclear and incorrect — use 'and fashionable'. Suggestion: Say 'it's 100 lbs' and 'it's comfortable and fashionable.'

× I still will I still buy it.

✓ I would still buy it.

Problem: Word order and modal choice are incorrect. For hypothetical situations use conditional 'would' and place auxiliary before verb: 'I would still buy it.' Suggestion: Use 'would' for willingness in hypothetical contexts and correct word order.

× If I must choose one, I will choose the comfortable shoes.

✓ If I had to choose one, I would choose comfortable shoes.

Problems: Real vs hypothetical conditional: 'If I must choose' is unnatural for hypothetical preference — use past-tense form 'If I had to...' with modal 'would' to express preference. Also drop 'the' before plural general noun 'comfortable shoes.' Suggestion: Use second conditional 'If I had to, I would...' for hypothetical choices.

× Why was MMM when I'm younger? Maybe I like the fashionable shoes because it can it enables me to special or unique.

✓ When I was younger, maybe I liked fashionable shoes because they made me feel special or unique.

Problems: Word order and tense: 'Why was MMM when I'm younger?' is nonsensical; correct temporal clause 'When I was younger'; 'Maybe I like' should be past 'liked' to match time frame; 'the fashionable shoes' should be 'fashionable shoes' or 'they' as plural; 'it can it enables me to special' incorrect subject and structure — use 'they made me feel special or unique.' Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits and 'make/feel' structure correctly.

× But for now I'm already 30 years, so I like comfortable and.

✓ But now I'm already 30, so I like comfortable shoes.

Problems: 'for now I'm already 30 years' is awkward — use 'now I'm already 30' or 'I'm 30 now'; 'I like comfortable and' is incomplete: specify 'comfortable shoes.' Suggestion: Use concise present-tense statements: 'I'm 30 now, so I prefer comfortable shoes.'