Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use appropriate grammar (articles, tense, plural), add one brief reason and use a linking word. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I don’t buy shoes very often; usually I buy a new pair once a year. I wear shoes daily until they’re worn out, so I only replace them when I really need to.

제안: Provide a clearer, fluent response with correct grammar and linking words. Start with a direct yes/no, explain briefly how you ensure fit, and add a short reason. Correct subject-verb agreement and pronouns.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online. To make sure they fit, I always check the size chart and read customer reviews, because I don’t want to waste money on a pair that doesn’t fit.

제안: Give a direct numeric answer first, then one concise reason with correct grammar and linking words. Use more appropriate vocabulary (e.g., “around $200”, “quality”, “reviews”). Avoid repetition and keep it under 3 sentences.

예시: I usually spend around $200 on a pair of shoes. I choose mid- to high-quality brands and always check online reviews to make sure they are durable.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence saying which you prefer and then provide a specific reason with correct word choice and grammar. Use linking words (because, since) and avoid vague words like “countable.” Keep it to 2 sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I work full time and spend long hours on my feet. Comfortable shoes help me stay comfortable and avoid foot pain during the workday.

× I will use it every day until it gets worn out and then that's the time I will buy a new shoes.

✓ I use my shoes every day until they get worn out, and then that's when I buy new shoes.

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so pronouns and verbs must agree. 'A new shoes' is incorrect; use 'new shoes' (no article) or 'a new pair of shoes'. Also tense and phrasing were adjusted for naturalness: simple present for habitual actions and plural pronoun 'they' for shoes.

× I've experienced buying shoes online to make sure that fits for me I check the sizes before I add them to cart.

✓ I've bought shoes online; to make sure they fit me, I check the sizes before I add them to the cart.

The verb 'fits' must agree with its subject 'they' (plural), so use 'fit'. Also 'experienced buying' is awkward; 'I've bought' is more natural. Added punctuation and article 'the' before 'cart' for correctness.

× I also want to make sure that my money don't get wasted after I bought it.

✓ I also want to make sure that my money doesn't get wasted after I buy something.

Subject-verb agreement with 'money' (treated as singular) requires 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Tense consistency: 'after I bought it' mixes past with present desire; use 'after I buy something' or 'after I bought something'. 'It' is vague; 'something' is clearer.

× I usually spend around two hundred bucks for shoes by choosing it I'll make sure that the shoes has a good quality and I always check the reviews of it and if it's nice, I usually buy it

✓ I usually spend around two hundred bucks on shoes. When choosing them, I make sure the shoes have good quality, and I always check their reviews; if they're good, I usually buy them.

Multiple plural/singular mismatches: use 'on shoes' not 'for shoes'. 'Choose it' should be 'choose them' (shoes plural). 'The shoes has' should be 'the shoes have'. Pronouns must match plural 'shoes' so use 'their' and 'they're'. Also sentence was run-on; split into clearer parts and corrected preposition.

× I would prefer a comfortable shoes.

✓ I would prefer comfortable shoes.

'A' cannot be used with plural 'shoes'. Either use 'comfortable shoes' (no article) or 'a comfortable pair of shoes'.

× As a full time employee, my work requires a lot of work.

✓ As a full-time employee, my job involves a lot of work.

The original is repetitive and has awkward structure. 'Full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as an adjective. 'My work requires a lot of work' repeats 'work'; better to say 'my job involves a lot of work' or 'my job is demanding.'

× So comfortable shoes would make my work easier and countable.

✓ So comfortable shoes would make my work easier and more manageable.

'Countable' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'more comfortable' or 'more manageable'. 'More manageable' fits the idea of making work easier. Replaced with appropriate adjective.