Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and use plural/singular agreement. Add one specific reason or example to support frequency. Keep to max 3–4 sentences.

예시: I enjoy buying shoes because they improve my overall look. I usually buy new shoes about once a month because I like to update my wardrobe affordably. For example, last month I bought a pair of casual loafers that go well with most of my outfits.

제안: Make the answer more natural by using precise vocabulary and varied sentence structure. Replace vague words like “stuff” and “application” with specific terms (items, websites/apps). Use a linking phrase to explain why convenience matters. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient and offers a wide selection. For example, I can easily compare sizes and styles on shopping websites, which saves me time and helps me find good deals.

제안: Be specific and avoid hesitations. State an exact typical amount, then give one clear reason for spending that much. Correct grammar (e.g., “shoes are one way to improve appearance”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating ideas.

예시: I usually spend about 3,000 baht on a good pair of shoes. I choose to spend that much because brand-name sneakers tend to last longer and look better, so it is a worthwhile investment.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one reason with an example. Remove filler words and correct grammar (e.g., “help” unnecessary, “support” not “supports” after plural). Use a linking word to show contrast between fashion and comfort. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them every day and need good foot support. For example, I usually choose cushioned sneakers or supportive sandals that I can wear to work or when walking long distances.

× I love buying shoes because I find that shoes is one of the best fashion and it could, uh, enhance your appearance and look in that day.

✓ I love buying shoes because I find that shoes are one of the best fashion items and they can enhance your appearance and look that day.

Errors: 'shoes is' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and definite article usage; 'the best fashion' is vague and needs a noun; 'it could' refers to plural 'shoes'. Correction changes 'is' to 'are' to agree with plural 'shoes', adds 'items' to complete the noun phrase, and uses 'they can' to match plural reference. Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number and use explicit nouns when describing categories.

× Uh, most of the time I buy it once a month because, uh, I'm short on money and I think that buying shoes once a month is a great way to start a new.

✓ Most of the time I buy them once a month because I'm short on money, and I think that buying shoes once a month is a great way to start anew.

Errors: 'buy it' is wrong pronoun for plural 'shoes'; 'start a new' is incorrect phrase. Correction uses 'them' to refer to shoes and 'start anew' as the correct idiom. Suggestion: match pronouns to the number of the noun and use established idiomatic expressions.

× I have bought a lot of shoes online because it's convenient and you can choose many different type of shoes, whether it's high heeled sneakers or stuff.

✓ I have bought a lot of shoes online because it's convenient and you can choose many different types of shoes, whether they're high-heeled sneakers or other styles.

Errors: 'type' should be plural 'types'; 'it's' referring to plural 'sneakers' should be 'they're'; 'high heeled' needs a hyphen 'high-heeled'; 'stuff' is vague. Correction pluralizes 'types', uses 'they're' for plural agreement, hyphenates compound adjective, and uses 'other styles' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure number agreement and replace vague words with specific terms.

× They all have it on the online application so that's why I often use these applications to buy all the shoes I'm interested in.

✓ They are all available on the online app, so that's why I often use these apps to buy the shoes I'm interested in.

Errors: 'have it on' awkward; 'online application' can be 'online app'; 'these applications' inconsistent with 'the online application'; 'all the shoes' better as 'the shoes'. Correction makes wording consistent and uses definite article for specific shoes. Suggestion: use consistent terms and appropriate articles for specific items.

× Right, I usually spend around thousands baht on shoes because I find that shoes is one of a way to, uh, promote your appearance to others.

✓ I usually spend around a few thousand baht on shoes because I find that shoes are a way to enhance your appearance to others.

Errors: 'around thousands baht' incorrect quantifier; 'shoes is' subject-verb disagreement; 'one of a way' ungrammatical. Correction uses 'a few thousand baht', 'shoes are', and 'a way' to correct structure and meaning. Suggestion: use proper quantifiers for amounts and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× And uh, for sneakers that umm, are brand names or sometimes you need them to be high quality to wear it efficiently.

✓ And for sneakers that are brand-name or when you need them to be high quality for comfortable wear.

Errors: 'brand names' used as adjective should be 'brand-name'; 'to wear it' uses singular pronoun for plural 'sneakers' and 'efficiently' is awkward for clothing. Correction uses 'them' and 'for comfortable wear' to be natural. Suggestion: use hyphenated adjectives and match pronouns to their antecedents; choose appropriate adverbs.

× I just spend around 3000 baht or up to.

✓ I usually spend around 3,000 baht or sometimes more.

Errors: 'or up to' is incomplete and sentence fragment-like. Correction completes the comparative idea with 'or sometimes more.' Suggestion: avoid leaving comparative phrases unfinished; make ranges explicit.

× I prefer shoes that are comfortable and support my feet. Help because uh, I would like to wear it every day and I don't want to buy shoes that are too fashionable and can't wear it at any occasions.

✓ I prefer shoes that are comfortable and support my feet because I would like to wear them every day, and I don't want to buy shoes that are too fashionable and can't be worn on many occasions.

Errors: 'Help' extraneous; 'wear it' uses singular pronoun for plural 'shoes'; 'can't wear it at any occasions' ungrammatical and awkward. Correction removes filler, uses 'them', and rephrases 'can't be worn on many occasions' to convey the meaning. Suggestion: match pronouns to nouns and use appropriate passive or active constructions for ability/possibility.

× So I would would prefer sneakers or sandals or uh, stuff that helps supports my feet.

✓ So I would prefer sneakers or sandals or other options that help support my feet.

Errors: duplicated 'would', 'helps supports' mixes singular verb with plural verb form. Correction removes duplicate and uses 'help support' (bare infinitive after 'help') and replaces 'stuff' with 'other options'. Suggestion: avoid repeated words and use correct verb forms after verbs like 'help'.