Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 注意发音和词汇使用（例如“banning”应为“buying”或“buying new”），用更自然简洁的句子直接回答问题。开头可以用一两句话明确表态，然后用一到两句补充频率和原因。避免冗长重复，句子控制在不超过5句内。可以用连接词如“usually”或“typically”来衔接频率信息。

예시: I don’t buy shoes very often. I usually buy two or three pairs a year, mainly one pair for everyday wear and one or two for sports or special occasions.

제안: 注意语法时态和短语搭配（例如“bought things like shoes line”应为“bought shoes online”），表达要更简洁。说明原因时用清晰的逻辑连接词如“because”或“so”。提到具体例子或常用网站可以增加细节。

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it’s convenient and I can compare several brands and reviews. For example, I usually order from Taobao or JD when I want sports shoes.

제안: 回答时减少犹豫词（umm, uh），用更准确的数字表达并把计算过程说清楚。先给每双鞋的大致价格，再说明购买频率并得出年花费。用连贯词如“so”或“therefore”连接句子。

예시: I usually spend about 300 RMB on a pair of shoes. I buy around three pairs each year, so I spend roughly 900 to 1,200 RMB annually on shoes.

제안: 先直接陈述偏好，然后用两到三句具体原因支持观点。避免重复啰嗦和语法错误（例如“affects”时态，句子结构需完整）。使用更精确的词汇描述如“make a good impression”或“express my personality”。可补充一两个具体例子说明如何搭配服装。

예시: I prefer fashionable shoes because they help make a good first impression and express my personality. For example, I choose smart leather shoes for meetings and trendy sneakers when I want a casual, stylish look.

× Well, actually As for me, I'm not really into banning shoes.

✓ Well, actually, as for me, I'm not really into buying shoes.

原句中使用了“banning” (禁止)，但说话者想表达“买鞋”，应使用动词buy的现在分词buying来表示喜欢做某事（be into + -ing）。建议记住固定搭配be into + 动名词。

× Maybe just every season or every year I will buy bunch shoes for the different types of like sports or for the daily and just two or three pairs.

✓ Maybe every season or every year I will buy a bunch of shoes for different sports or for daily use — just two or three pairs.

原句缺少不定冠词a并且名词短语顺序错误。英语中表示“一堆/一些鞋”应为“a bunch of shoes”；修饰名词的短语顺序也需要调整。建议注意数量词后常接of + 名词。

× Yes, actually I often bought things like shoes line and I have several brands to choose of and a light bending is very convenient for me so I can just don't go to the store and buy my shoes online.

✓ Yes, actually I often buy things like shoes online and I have several brands to choose from. Online shopping is very convenient for me, so I don't have to go to the store and can buy my shoes online.

句子时态应与现在习惯相符，用一般现在时（often buy）而不是过去时（bought）。另外有若干用法错误：'shoes line' -> 'shoes online'；'choose of' -> 'choose from'；'a light bending' 无意义，应为 'online shopping' 或 'it'；否定结构也错误，'can just don't' 应为 'don't have to' 或 'can just not'. 建议复习一般现在时和固定搭配 choose from, online shopping, don't have to。

× Probably, umm, I'm not really think about it. I had to say that maybe 300 RMB of one pair and uh, I will usually buy 3 pairs of a year, so it just uh, 1000 and CN¥1200 every year.

✓ Probably, umm, I don't really think about it. I'd say maybe 300 RMB for one pair and I usually buy three pairs a year, so it's about 900 to 1,200 RMB every year.

'I'm not really think' 是时态和形式错误，应为一般现在时 'don't really think'。'I had to say' 用法不当，应为 'I'd say'（I would say）。'300 RMB of one pair' 应为 '300 RMB for one pair'；'3 pairs of a year' 顺序错误，应为 'three pairs a year'；数值计算和表达也需调整。建议掌握一般现在时、习惯表达 'I'd say' 和介词 for 表示价格/每件。

× As for me, I like the fashionable shoes rather than the comfortable shoes because I think that shoes can, uh, affects people's first impression and, uh, it has different meaning to me that, uh, express my personality and something like that.

✓ As for me, I prefer fashionable shoes rather than comfortable ones because I think shoes can affect people's first impressions, and they have different meanings for me — they express my personality and so on.

动词与主语不一致：'shoes can, uh, affects' 中应为 'affect'（原形）; 'first impression' 在此应使用复数 'first impressions' 更自然；'it has different meaning' 主语与代词不一致，且意义模糊，应为复数 'they have different meanings' 并接不定式改为 'they express my personality'。建议注意主谓一致、复数形式和代词指代一致。

× And the shoes had to fit my clothes style, uh, of the person who really likes the fancy or smart.

✓ And the shoes have to fit my clothing style, or the style of a person who really likes fancy or smart clothes.

原句中时态和介词使用混乱：'had to' 改为一般现在时 'have to' 表示习惯；'fit my clothes style' 应为 'fit my clothing style' 或 'fit my clothes'；'of the person who really likes the fancy or smart' 结构不完整，应补全为 'or the style of a person who really likes fancy or smart clothes'。建议理清介词和名词搭配（clothing style / style of someone）。