Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, natural and directly addresses the question. To improve, shorten and tighten the response to avoid redundancy, use one strong topic sentence and one supporting reason with a linking word. Also avoid repeating the same idea (season/once every season).

예시: Yes, I do. I buy shoes about four times a year because I like to have comfortable pairs suited to different seasons and activities.

제안: Good structure and useful details with pros and cons. To improve further, combine ideas with concise linking phrases and correct a small tense/grammar point (use 'if the size doesn't fit' or 'if the sizes don't fit'). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient and many retailers offer free returns if the size doesn't fit. However, delivery can take a week or two, but overall it saves me time compared with shopping in physical stores.

제안: Your content is relevant but there are hesitations, some grammar errors and an incorrect word choice ('software' instead of 'shoes'). To improve: remove fillers, correct grammar (e.g. 'cheaper shoes are often uncomfortable'), and use precise vocabulary. Give one clear topic sentence with a reason and an example if needed.

예시: I usually spend about 200 to 300 RMB on a pair of shoes because cheaper ones are often uncomfortable and made from poor-quality materials, so I prefer to invest in durable, comfortable shoes that last longer.

제안: Your answer communicates the preference and reasons, but contains pronunciation-like transcription (ACH), repetition ('practically practicality'), and small grammar issues ('especially when have to'). Improve by removing redundant words, using a linking phrase, and polishing grammar. Keep it to two sentences: topic + reason.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because painful shoes distract me and make it hard to concentrate. Therefore, I usually choose practicality over style, especially when I have to commute or work long hours.

× I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient and many retailers offer free returns or exchanges if the size didn't fit.

✓ I usually buy shoes online because it's more convenient and many retailers offer free returns or exchanges if the size doesn't fit.

No correction needed for past participle: sentence uses past simple 'didn't fit' correctly to refer to a past attempt; however for general policy about returns, the present perfect 'doesn't fit' or 'does not fit' is more appropriate. Suggestion: use 'doesn't fit' for general condition: 'if the size doesn't fit.' This aligns condition with present/future returns policy.

× the cheaper shoes is shoes are often uncomfortable and made from poor quality materials.

✓ cheaper shoes are often uncomfortable and made from poor-quality materials.

Original contains extra words and incorrect verb agreement: 'shoes is shoes' is redundant and 'shoes' plural requires plural verb 'are.' Also use a hyphen in compound adjective 'poor-quality.' Suggestion: remove duplication, use 'are' for plural subjects, and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I prefer to invest a bit more in comfortable, durable software that, uh, lasts longer.

✓ I prefer to invest a bit more in comfortable, durable footwear that lasts longer.

The word 'software' is incorrect in this context; 'footwear' or 'shoes' is the appropriate noun. Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses. Use 'that lasts longer' to describe durable footwear. Suggestion: choose the correct noun for the category (footwear) and avoid filler words.

× I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoe ones because uncomfortable shoes make my feet ACH and distract me.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because uncomfortable shoes make my feet ache and distract me.

Several issues: 'shoe ones' is redundant—use 'ones.' 'ACH' appears to be a typo; the correct verb is 'ache.' Use 'ache' to describe pain. Also 'distract me' is fine. Suggestion: remove redundancy, correct typo, and use 'ache' as verb.

× If my shoes hurt, I can't concentrate my work or daily activities so I usually choose practically practicality over style, especially when have to work a lot or commute.

✓ If my shoes hurt, I can't concentrate on my work or daily activities, so I usually choose practicality over style, especially when I have to work a lot or commute.

Multiple errors: 'concentrate my work' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'concentrate on my work.' Missing comma before conjunction. 'Practically practicality' is wrong—choose noun 'practicality.' Missing subject 'I' before 'have to work.' Suggestion: use correct preposition 'on,' choose the correct noun 'practicality,' include necessary commas, and ensure subjects are present in clauses.