Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your response more direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "warm shoes" and reduce redundancy. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g. "I don't buy shoes often").

예시: I don't buy shoes very often. I prefer to keep and care for the shoes I have, so I usually only replace them when they are badly worn or dirty. For example, I repaired or cleaned my sneakers several times before finally buying a new pair last year.

제안: Give a clear, concise answer and use correct grammar. Start with a direct statement, briefly describe the experience with specific details, and finish with a consequence or opinion. Use linking words (for example, however, so) to organize ideas.

예시: No, I usually avoid buying shoes online because once I ordered a pair that looked good in photos but didn't fit me at all. For example, they were too narrow and uncomfortable, so I returned them and decided I prefer trying shoes on in stores.

제안: Be realistic and precise about amounts, and explain reasons clearly. Start with the amount, then give specific reasons and link them logically. Avoid vague or inconsistent statements (e.g. very high amount without context).

예시: I usually spend around CN¥1,000 to CN¥1,500 on a good pair of shoes. I choose shoes that are not flashy but comfortable and flexible because I exercise frequently and need footwear that supports movement.

제안: Answer directly, then add 1–2 specific supporting reasons and a brief exception if needed. Use linking words (for example, however, although) to connect ideas and avoid repetition of phrases like "prefer comfortable shoes".

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear sporty clothes most days and need footwear that supports long walks and exercise. However, if I go to a fancy restaurant or an important event, I will choose more fashionable shoes to match the outfit.

× Not really because I like to use warm shoes for a long time so I try to keep it clean always.

✓ Not really, because I like to use shoes for a long time, so I always try to keep them clean.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'; use 'them'. Word order and adverb placement improved: 'always' normally goes before the verb or after the auxiliary, here 'always try' is natural. Also add commas for clarity.

× I usually buy shoes when it gets dirty or unable to use.

✓ I usually buy shoes when they get too worn or unusable.

The original mixes singular 'it' with plural 'shoes' and uses awkward phrasing 'unable to use'. Use plural pronoun 'they' and clearer adjectives 'too worn' or 'unusable' to convey meaning.

× No I haven't because I had an experience where my shoes that I bought on online wasn't didn't fit my actual fit so I regret buying that in the past.

✓ No, I haven't, because I once had an experience where shoes I bought online didn't fit me, so I regret that purchase.

Preposition 'on' before 'online' is unnecessary; 'on online' is incorrect. Also mixed auxiliary forms 'wasn't didn't' are wrong; use simple past 'didn't fit'. Replace 'my actual fit' with 'fit me' and streamline phrasing.

× So I have but I will never buy online.

✓ So I have, but I will never buy online again.

The short sentence 'So I have' is unclear; adding a comma and 'again' clarifies meaning. Pronoun issues resolved in previous sentence; here add 'again' to show future intention.

× I usually spend CN¥10,000.

✓ I usually spend around CN¥10,000.

Adding 'around' or 'about' makes the amount sound natural when speaking; without it the statement can seem absolute but grammatically it's acceptable. This suggestion refines usage rather than fixing an outright error.

× I tend to purchase something not fancy but flexible to move because I really love to exercise and work a lot.

✓ I tend to buy shoes that are not fancy but flexible and allow easy movement because I really like to exercise and work a lot.

Use 'buy' instead of 'purchase' for spoken style (optional). 'Flexible to move' is ungrammatical; replace with 'flexible and allow easy movement' or 'comfortable for moving'. Also 'love to exercise' fits better than 'like' but both are fine.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I typically wear something sporty and comfortable always.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I typically wear sporty, comfortable clothes.

Awkward adverb placement 'comfortable always' should be 'always comfortable' or rephrase. 'Something sporty and comfortable' is vague; 'sporty, comfortable clothes' is clearer. Maintain present simple tense 'prefer' and 'wear'.

× So to match the outfit I usually prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ So, to match my outfit, I usually prefer comfortable shoes.

Add commas and 'my' before 'outfit' for clarity and natural English. This fixes sentence flow rather than a core grammar error.

× But when I go to something fancy restaurant I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ But when I go to a fancy restaurant, I prefer fashionable shoes.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'fancy restaurant' and place commas. 'Go to something fancy restaurant' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'go to a fancy restaurant'.