Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ звучит естественно и тёпло, но есть ошибки в грамматике и повторения («literally one week ago» дважды). Также ответы лучше начинать с тематического предложения, затем дать одно-два уточняющих предложения. Избегайте ненужных заполнителей («uh») и следите за временами (используйте Past Simple для действий в прошлом).

예시: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. For example, last week I bought three pairs for walking, training and going out. I like trying different styles because each pair suits a different activity.

제안: Ответ ясен и релевантен, но фразы фрагментированы и есть паузы/повторы. Лучше использовать связующие слова (for example, therefore) и объединять предложения в более связное высказывание. Следите за формой глаголов и избегайте разрывов предложения.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it allows me to browse many options and compare prices. For example, I use shopping apps to check reviews and find the best deals, so I can choose quality shoes at a good price.

제안: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и не очень чёткую структуру (несогласование числительных и существительных, времена). Уточняйте средний диапазон расходов и приводите конкретные примеры без лишних слов. Используйте связки для логики: generally, for instance.

예시: It depends, but generally I spend between $50 and $150 on shoes. For instance, last month I spent about $100 on two pairs of boots which I now wear every day.

제안: Идея понятна, но формулировки громоздкие и есть тавтология. Лучше дать чёткое мнение в первом предложении, затем пояснить причину и привести пример. Избегайте повторов и смешения времён.

예시: I prefer fashionable shoes more now, although I used to choose comfort first. For example, I used to buy sneakers for daily walks, but recently I choose smarter styles that look better for social events.

× I literally one week ago I have bought.

✓ I bought them literally one week ago.

The original mixes present perfect ('have bought') with a specific past time expression ('one week ago'), which requires past simple. Also the sentence lacks an object; adding 'them' or 'three pairs' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use past simple with definite past time expressions: 'I bought ... one week ago.'

× Literally one week ago I bought 3 pairs of shoes for myself.

✓ Literally one week ago I bought three pairs of shoes for myself.

Use of numeral '3' is acceptable but in formal writing spell out small numbers as words. Grammatically sentence is fine; change improves style and consistency. Keep past simple for specific past time.

× I'm really into different types, uh, for walking, for trainings, for dating and so on.

✓ I'm really into different types, like ones for walking, training, dating, and so on.

Use 'for training' is awkward; 'training' as noun works without 'for' when listing types. 'Like' or 'such as' is better than 'for' after 'types'. Also 'trainings' is plural noun rarely used in this sense; use 'training' or 'sports'.

× I definitely have bought some shoes online as I'm interested in searching different items for my house, for my wardrobe.

✓ I have bought some shoes online because I like looking for different items for my home and wardrobe.

'Have bought' is acceptable, but 'as I'm interested in searching' is unnatural; use 'because I like looking for' or 'because I'm interested in looking for'. 'House' -> 'home' sounds more natural. 'Searching different items' should be 'looking for different items.'

× Umm using online apps.

✓ I use online apps.

Fragment missing subject and auxiliary. 'Using online apps.' is a sentence fragment; convert to complete sentence 'I use online apps.' or 'I use online apps to shop.' Suggestion: include subject and verb.

× It gives me the freedom of choosing.

✓ They give me the freedom to choose.

Subject agreement: 'apps' or 'it' unclear—use 'they' if referring to apps or 'it' to refer to online shopping in general. 'Freedom of choosing' is less natural than 'freedom to choose.' Verb form 'to choose' is correct after 'freedom.'

× I can compare the prices.

✓ I can compare prices.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; remove 'the' for general statement. Keep modal 'can' for ability. No tense change needed.

× Oh, uh, it's complicated question as I really have different budgets on my wardrobe things.

✓ Oh, it's a complicated question because I have different budgets for my wardrobe items.

Missing article 'a' before 'complicated question.' 'As' can be used but 'because' is clearer. 'Have different budgets on' incorrect preposition: use 'for.' 'Wardrobe things' awkward; use 'wardrobe items' or 'clothing.'

× Uh, As for example, last month I spent about $100 for new pair of shoes.

✓ For example, last month I spent about $100 on a new pair of shoes.

'As for example' redundant; use 'for example.' Use preposition 'on' with 'spend' instead of 'for.' Include article 'a' before 'new pair.' Amount $100 should match singular pair.

× It was 2 uh, boots and I use it every day.

✓ They were two boots, and I use them every day.

'Two boots' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'were.' 'Use it' mismatches singular. Consider 'a pair of boots' (singular), then 'It was a pair of boots and I use it every day.' Choose consistent phrasing.

× Oh that's uh, that's excellent question since I'm thinking that nowadays I'm changing my opinion from the comfortable shoes to the fashionable.

✓ That's an excellent question; I think that nowadays my opinion is changing from preferring comfortable shoes to preferring fashionable ones.

Missing article 'an' before 'excellent question.' Sentence structure awkward: 'I'm thinking that nowadays I'm changing my opinion' better as 'I think that nowadays my opinion is changing.' 'From the comfortable shoes to the fashionable' incorrect article use; use no article or 'comfortable shoes' and 'fashionable ones.'

× So I was really interested in comfort in my everyday walking, so now I try to change my opinion about comfort to the fashion itself.

✓ I used to value comfort for my everyday walking, but now I'm trying to shift my preference from comfort to fashion.

Use 'used to' for past habit. 'Interested in comfort in my everyday walking' is awkward — 'value comfort for everyday walking' is clearer. 'Change my opinion about comfort to the fashion itself' is unnatural; use 'shift my preference from comfort to fashion.'