Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, use correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. State frequency if asked. Use past tense correctly for habits in childhood. Add one specific detail and a linking phrase. Avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy them a few times a year. I prefer Adidas because they are very comfortable; I’ve worn them since childhood, so I trust their fit and durability.

제안: Answer directly, use clear tense and specific details. Explain briefly why you bought online and avoid confusing or irrelevant numbers. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because the website offered a big discount. For example, I bought a pair of Nike trainers at 30% off, which made them affordable compared with showroom prices.

제안: Give a clear estimate and reason. Use one topic sentence with a specific amount or range, then a supporting detail about purpose (e.g., sports). Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing.

예시: I usually spend around $50–$100 per pair because I need durable shoes for volleyball. I prefer spending more on quality sports shoes since they offer better support and last longer.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, then give a specific reason and an example. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'comfortable', 'stylish/fashionable') and avoid vague phrases. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with a linking word like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I play volleyball and need good support. For instance, I choose shoes with cushioning and ankle support rather than fashionable styles that might be less practical.

× Yes, I like buying shoes because it gave me a comfortable.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because they are comfortable for me.

The student used 'gave' (past tense) incorrectly and 'a comfortable' (noun/adjective error). The sentence refers to a general present preference, so present tense and correct noun/pronoun agreement are needed. Use 'are comfortable' to describe shoes in general and 'they' to refer to shoes.

× I like Adidas shoes because it is very comfortable and in the childhood I am buying these shoes so that's why I like Adidas shoes.

✓ I like Adidas shoes because they are very comfortable, and in childhood I used to buy these shoes, so that's why I like Adidas shoes.

'It is' is incorrect because 'Adidas shoes' is plural; use 'they are' (subject-verb agreement). 'In the childhood I am buying' mixes wrong article and tense; use 'in childhood' and 'used to buy' to express past habitual action.

× Uh yes I bought a shoe online because the online platform gave me a good day discount on the shoes.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online because the online platform gave me a good discount for the day.

'A shoe' is singular while context suggests plural; 'good day discount' is unnatural word order. Keep past tense 'bought' and 'gave' but correct noun number and phrase order: 'a good discount for the day' or 'a good one-day discount.'

× Then I will also also purchase the Nike shoes in online because it is very expensive.

✓ Then I will also purchase Nike shoes online because they are very expensive.

Remove duplicate 'also'. Use 'online' without 'in'. 'Nike shoes' is plural so use 'they are' (subject-verb agreement). The future tense 'will purchase' is acceptable for intended future action.

× That is the $10,000.

✓ That costs $10,000.

Original sentence lacks proper verb and unit expression. Use 'costs' to describe price and omit 'the' before a currency amount.

× So in the in the Adidas showroom they are.

✓ So they are available in the Adidas showroom.

Original fragment 'they are' is incomplete. Clarify by stating availability: 'they are available in the Adidas showroom.'

× I always spend a lot of money on the shoes because I like the shoes because it I am playing the volleyball.

✓ I always spend a lot of money on shoes because I play volleyball.

Remove redundant 'the' before 'shoes' and 'the volleyball'. Use present simple 'play' for habitual action rather than present continuous 'I am playing.' Also remove repeated 'because' and extraneous words.

× So I I am always buying the red tape shoes because it save a lot of time and effort and I always use spend a lot of lot of money about the shoes.

✓ So I always buy Red Tape shoes because they save a lot of time and effort, and I always spend a lot of money on shoes.

Use present simple 'buy' and 'save' for habitual facts. 'Red Tape' (brand) is capitalized and plural 'shoes' with 'they save.' Correct 'use spend' to 'spend' and 'about the shoes' to 'on shoes.' Remove duplicate words.

× I always prefer the comfortable shoes because I am a player of volleyball.

✓ I always prefer comfortable shoes because I play volleyball.

Use present simple 'prefer' and 'play' for habits. Omit 'the' before general plural 'comfortable shoes' and rephrase 'a player of volleyball' to 'I play volleyball.'

× Uh, so that's why I wearing a wedding always comfortable shoes because it gave me a good connection in the game.

✓ So that's why I always wear comfortable shoes, because they give me a better grip during the game.

'I wearing' is incorrect; use 'I wear' (present simple). 'A wedding' is irrelevant; likely misused. 'It gave me a good connection' is awkward—'they give me a better grip' or 'better support' is clearer. Use present tense 'give' for general truths.

× So that why I prefer the comfortable shoes is a cheaper than the fascinated shoes.

✓ So that's why I prefer comfortable shoes; they are cheaper than fashionable shoes.

Sentence structure is incorrect. Use comparative 'cheaper than' with correct noun 'fashionable shoes' (not 'fascinated'). Remove unnecessary 'the' before plural nouns when speaking generally. Ensure clarity by separating clauses.