Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve fluency and clarity by removing fillers and repetition, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so"). Reduce minor grammar errors (e.g., plural/singular).

예시: I don't buy shoes very often; usually I buy one pair every five months because shoes are long-lasting. For example, a good pair can last several years, so it's unnecessary to shop monthly.

제안: Be more precise with grammar and variety of vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific advantages with linking words. Avoid repeating words like "convenient" twice.

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it's very convenient. For instance, websites let me filter by size and color quickly, and customer reviews help me choose the right model.

제안: Clarify unclear phrases and correct grammar (singular/plural, articles). Use precise vocabulary instead of vague terms like "re stable opportunities." Give one clear reason and an example of value for money.

예시: I usually spend about $100 per pair because I value good workmanship and durability. For example, a well-made pair lasts longer and feels more comfortable, so it's worth the price.

제안: Good structure and relevance. Improve naturalness by using concise phrasing and accurate collocations (e.g., "formal occasions", "fashionable shoes"). Add one specific example and a linking word to contrast choices.

예시: It depends on the occasion. For formal occasions like interviews or meetings I prefer fashionable shoes, for example leather dress shoes. However, for outdoor activities I choose comfortable sports shoes so I can move more easily.

× Well, to be honest, I buy shoes in a very low frequency, about one per five months.

✓ Well, to be honest, I buy shoes very infrequently, about one pair every five months.

Singular/plural and word choice: 'a very low frequency' is unnatural; use 'infrequently'. 'One per five months' should be 'one pair every five months' to show number and time correctly. Change 'shoes' to 'one pair' for count accuracy.

× Because shoes shoes are uh, long term object.

✓ Because shoes are long-term items.

Singular/plural and article use: 'shoes shoes' is a repetition; 'long term' needs a hyphen as 'long-term' when used as an adjective. 'Object' is incorrect; use the plural countable noun 'items' for shoes.

× You can wear it for that years, so it is not necessary to buy it once a month or even faster.

✓ You can wear them for years, so it is not necessary to buy them once a month or more often.

Pronoun and tense/number: 'it' should be 'them' to match plural 'shoes'. 'for that years' is ungrammatical; use 'for years'. 'even faster' is unnatural here; use 'more often' to compare purchase frequency.

× Yes, actually every shoes I bought were from online because buying shoes online is very convenient.

✓ Yes, actually every pair of shoes I have bought was bought online because buying shoes online is very convenient.

Singular/plural and verb tense/agreement: 'every shoes' is incorrect; use 'every pair of shoes'. Use present perfect 'have bought' to indicate past actions relevant to now and match singular 'every' with singular verb 'was bought' or rephrase as above. 'from online' should be 'online' or 'bought online'.

× You can change the color, the model, the size you want is more convenient than physical stores.

✓ You can choose the color, model, and size you want, which is more convenient than shopping in physical stores.

Sentence structure and preposition use: Original is a run-on and missing relative clause. Use 'which is more convenient' to link and 'shopping in physical stores' is the correct phrase.

× About $100 per pair because I pay attention to the workmanship and re stable opportunities.

✓ About $100 per pair because I pay attention to workmanship and reasonable durability.

Word choice and phrase errors: 're stable opportunities' is unintelligible—likely intended 'reasonable durability' or 'stability/durability'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before uncountable 'workmanship'.

× If the shoes is too cheap it will be not comfortable to wear.

✓ If the shoes are too cheap, they will not be comfortable to wear.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun use: 'shoes' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is', and 'they' instead of 'it'. Place 'not' before 'be comfortable' or use 'will not be comfortable' as corrected.

× Well, that depends on occasion.

✓ Well, that depends on the occasion.

Article use: 'occasion' as a singular countable noun requires the definite article 'the' in this context.

× In a formal occasion such as interviews or a meeting, I prefer some fashion shoes.

✓ On formal occasions such as interviews or meetings, I prefer fashionable shoes.

Preposition and adjective use: Use plural 'occasions' and preposition 'on'. 'a meeting' vs 'meetings' for parallelism. 'fashion shoes' is incorrect; use adjective 'fashionable shoes'.

× And for some outdoor activities I prefer some comfortable shoes such as sports shoes that may make me run faster.

✓ For outdoor activities, I prefer comfortable shoes such as sports shoes that may help me run faster.

Redundancy and word choice: Remove unnecessary 'some' and add comma after introductory phrase. 'may make me run faster' is acceptable but 'help me run faster' is more natural.