Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, use a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Correct collocations (e.g., “a big fan of shoes”), verb forms and comparative phrases. Keep to 2–4 sentences and add a linking word to clarify frequency.

예시: Not really — I'm not a big fan of buying shoes. I only buy them when I need them or when my old ones become too short, so I usually buy shoes about twice a year.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give concise reasons using correct grammar and linking words (e.g., because, so). Use correct verbs and pronouns (fit me → fits me; a shoes → a pair of shoes).

예시: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on to make sure they fit. Therefore I avoid online purchases since I worry about size and comfort.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence about typical spending, use realistic currency formatting, and avoid contradictions. Use linking words (for example, but, and) and correct nouns/plurals. Provide a specific usual range rather than unclear numbers.

예시: I don't buy shoes often, and I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a comfortable pair. However, if a pair costs more than $200, I would consider it too expensive.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer then 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (is → are; makes → make) and avoid repetition. If mentioning additional details (e.g., feminine), explain briefly how that matters.

예시: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them all day and comfort matters most. If a shoe is only fashionable but uncomfortable, I won't wear it even if it looks good.

× No, actually I'm not a big fan with shoe.

✓ No, actually I'm not a big fan of shoes.

Use 'fan of' not 'fan with'; 'shoes' should be plural because we talk about the category in general. Suggestion: use 'a big fan of' + plural noun for general preferences.

× I only bought shoes when I need it or it is too shorter to be wear.

✓ I only buy shoes when I need them or they are too worn to wear.

The sentence mixes past 'bought' with present 'need'. Use present simple 'buy' for habitual actions. 'Shoes' requires plural pronoun 'them'; 'too shorter to be wear' is incorrect: use 'too worn to wear' or 'too short to wear'. Suggestion: match tense for habits and use correct adjective and infinitive form.

× So mostly I bought shoes maybe twice a year.

✓ So mostly I buy shoes maybe twice a year.

For habitual frequency use present simple 'buy' not past 'bought'. Ensure tense matches 'mostly' and frequency adverbs.

× No, I've never bought a pair of shoes online because I think it is important for me to try it out to make sure it is fit me.

✓ No, I've never bought a pair of shoes online because I think it is important for me to try them on to make sure they fit me.

Use 'try them on' for shoes and plural pronoun 'them'; 'fit' should be plain form with plural subject 'they'. 'Try it out' is unnatural for clothing fit. Suggestion: use 'try them on' and match verb to plural subject.

× So if buying a shoes online I may not be able to try it personally so I haven't done that before.

✓ So if I buy shoes online I may not be able to try them personally, so I haven't done that before.

Add subject 'I' for the conditional clause and use present simple 'buy' for general condition. Use plural 'shoes' and pronoun 'them'. Add a comma before 'so' connecting clauses.

× Actually I'm not a big fan of buying shoes so I just bought shoes that are very comfortable and I think usually I spend about $1080 for a shoes and if the shoes is over $2000 I may think it's a little too expensive.

✓ Actually I'm not a big fan of buying shoes, so I just buy shoes that are very comfortable and I think I usually spend about $1,080 on a pair of shoes, and if the shoes are over $2,000 I may think they're a little too expensive.

Maintain present simple for habits ('I just buy'). Use 'on' for spending money, use 'a pair of shoes' to refer to a single purchase, format numbers with commas. Match verb agreement: 'shoes are' and pronoun 'they're'. Suggestion: use consistent tense and correct preposition 'on' for money.

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

✓ Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

No correction needed: sentence is grammatical. Included to show no change required.

× I prefer comfortable shoes definitely simply because we need to wear shoes the whole day.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes simply because we need to wear shoes all day.

Move adverb 'definitely' to natural position before verb. 'The whole day' is acceptable but 'all day' is more natural here. Suggestion: place adverbs near the verb and use natural time expressions.

× So if the shoes is only fashionable and good looking but not comfortable or not feminine, it may makes me feel very very uncomfortable and I don't want to wear it anymore.

✓ So if the shoes are only fashionable and good-looking but not comfortable or not feminine, they may make me feel very uncomfortable and I won't want to wear them anymore.

Match plural subject 'shoes' with plural verb 'are' and 'make'; 'good-looking' needs a hyphen when used as adjective before a noun. Use plural pronouns 'they/them'. Use 'won't want' for natural future preference. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent pronoun use.

× So even if it is very good looking. I don't want to put it on.

✓ So even if they are very good-looking, I still don't want to put them on.

Combine fragments into one sentence; refer back to 'shoes' with plural pronoun 'they/them' and use 'good-looking'. Use a comma rather than a period to link the dependent clause. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and maintain number agreement.