Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, use correct grammar and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give frequency and preference with one or two supporting details. Avoid awkward phrases like "sneaker hood" and redundant words.

예시: Not really. I only buy shoes when I need them, usually one or two pairs a year. I prefer comfortable styles and choose shoes that suit my daily activities and personal taste.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer reasons with linking words. Fix tense and word order. Keep it concise and add a brief supporting detail about checking fit and colour.

예시: No, I haven’t. I prefer shopping in stores because I can try shoes on to check the fit and colour, and I find it more reliable than online shopping.

제안: Give a clear numeric answer and correct phrasing. Avoid confusing numbers and grammar errors. State a realistic amount and justify briefly.

예시: I usually spend about 200 to 300 dollars on a good pair of shoes because I value comfort and durability.

제안: State your preference clearly and complete the explanation. Use correct grammar and link reason to outcome. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting sentence.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because comfort affects how well I can walk and work all day, so I choose shoes that support my feet.

× As I am not a sneaker hood, I did not like buying shoes, but I prefer buying one or two pair of shoes whenever I need and I choose comfortable shoes according to my taste and preferences.

✓ As I am not a sneaker fan, I do not like buying shoes, but I prefer to buy one or two pairs of shoes whenever I need them, and I choose comfortable shoes according to my taste and preferences.

Uses wrong noun 'hood' instead of 'fan' and mixes past and present tenses; 'did not like' implies past while the meaning is general, so use present 'do not like'. 'Buying one or two pair' has adjective/number agreement issue; use plural 'pairs'. Add 'to buy' for correct verb pattern and 'them' to refer to 'pairs'. Suggestions: replace informal/wrong words with accurate adjectives (fan), keep consistent present tense for habits, ensure plural form for countable nouns and include necessary pronouns.

× Honestly not, I did not buy shoes from online platform because I did not trust them easily as I prefer buying from stores as it helps me to make a fit check of the size and the colour according to my friend.

✓ Honestly, no. I have not bought shoes from online platforms because I do not trust them easily; I prefer buying from stores because they help me check the fit, size, and colour, often with my friend's opinion.

Tense and subject-verb issues: student used past 'did not buy' but question asks about experience—present perfect 'have not bought' is appropriate. 'Online platform' should be plural or uncountable 'online platforms'. 'Did not trust them easily' mixes tense and awkward adverb placement; use 'do not trust them easily'. 'Helps me to make a fit check of the size and the colour according to my friend' is unclear and ungrammatical—use 'help me check the fit, size, and colour, often with my friend's opinion'. Suggestions: use present perfect for life experiences, keep present tense for general preferences, pluralize nouns correctly, and simplify phrases for clarity.

× I think spending too much amount of money on shoes was fully best, so I prefer spending around 2004 thousand on buying comfortable shoes.

✓ I don't think spending too much money on shoes is a good idea, so I prefer spending around 2000 on comfortable shoes.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and confused: 'spending too much amount of money... was fully best' mixes tense and nonsensical modifiers. Use present tense for general opinion: 'I don't think spending too much money... is a good idea'. The number '2004 thousand' is incorrect; likely meant '2000' or '2,004'; choose 'around 2000'. Omit unnecessary words 'on buying' by 'on comfortable shoes'. Suggestions: express opinions with clear structures (I think/I don't think... is a good idea), use realistic numeric expressions, and keep concise phrasing.

× I choose comfort over the fashion because I really think that comfort was the one of the most important thing that will help you to.

✓ I choose comfort over fashion because I really think that comfort is one of the most important things that will help you.

Mixed tenses and article errors: 'comfort was the one of the most important thing' mixes past 'was' with present belief—use present 'is'. 'the one of the most important thing' is incorrect article and number—use 'one of the most important things'. 'help you to' is incomplete; omit 'to' after 'help you' or add an infinitive (help you to [do something]). Suggestions: keep tense consistent (present for general beliefs), use correct article and pluralization with 'one of the...', and complete verb phrases when using 'help'.