Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, like) and check verb forms (e.g., 'I buy them').

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy them about once a month. I prefer shopping online because I can read customer reviews and compare prices, which helps me find cheaper and better-quality options.

제안: Give a clear, structured answer: state if you have bought shoes online, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear words ('rabbit') and correct grammar (e.g., 'I bought shoes online', 'they fit well'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'recently'.

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is convenient and saves time. For example, I recently bought a pair of sneakers that fit well, and I read several reviews beforehand to make sure the size and quality were right.

제안: Answer with a specific amount or range, then explain the reason briefly and clearly. Correct vocabulary ('feet' not 'food') and reduce hesitation. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: I usually spend around $60 to $120 on a pair of shoes because I believe good shoes protect my feet and last longer, so paying more is cost-effective in the long run.

제안: Give a direct preference sentence, then add a specific contrast using linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Use correct words ('heels' or 'dress shoes' instead of 'small shoe') and avoid unclear phrases ('fake me gift').

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk or run for long periods without pain. However, for special events I sometimes choose fashionable shoes, such as heels or dress shoes, to improve my outfit's appearance.

× I love buying shoes and I buy it like every month if I have uh, and I always like choose buying online because I can choose, I can read the review and due to the like the cheap uh price.

✓ I love buying shoes and I buy them about every month when I can. I always prefer buying online because I can choose, read reviews, and the prices are cheaper.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes' so use 'them' (problem type 12). Also awkward phrasing and articles; 'the review' should be plural 'reviews' and 'due to the cheap price' is unnatural so rephrase to 'the prices are cheaper'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer word order.

× I have both a shoes online because it's very easy and it's like rabbit and it's comfortable for me to like I don't can move everywhere.

✓ I have bought shoes online because it's very easy and convenient, and it is comfortable for me even when I travel around.

Incorrect quantifier/word choice 'both a shoes' and misuse of 'both' (problem type 14). The sentence also uses wrong words ('rabbit') and incorrect modal phrasing 'I don't can'. Correct by using 'bought' for past experience (past participle) and clearer vocabulary 'convenient' and 'travel around'.

× And recently I I got to some sneaker, my sneaker and it's fit well.

✓ Recently I got some sneakers; my sneakers fit well.

Tense and number errors: 'got to some sneaker' is incorrect; use simple past 'got' or 'bought' and plural 'sneakers' if referring to more than one or 'a sneaker' for one (problem type 5). Also 'it's fit' is incorrect; use 'they fit' for plural or 'it fits' for singular. Adjust subject-verb agreement accordingly.

× I really like it and I like to like see the review as can help me to.

✓ I really like them and I like to read reviews because they can help me.

Pronoun 'it' should match plural 'sneakers' so use 'them' (problem type 12). 'See the review' is unnatural; use 'read reviews' and finish clause 'because they can help me'. Ensure correct verb forms.

× I tend to spend a quite a bit for on a shoe because I think like buying a shoe, a good shoe is very important for my food and it can I can buy just just it's a little bit expensive, but I can use in the long term.

✓ I tend to spend quite a bit on shoes because I think buying a good shoe is important for my feet, and although it may be a bit expensive, I can use it long-term.

Multiple quantifier and article errors: 'a quite a bit' and 'for on a shoe' are incorrect; use 'quite a bit on shoes' (problem types 14 and 22). 'Food' is incorrect word choice for 'feet' (problem type 13: incorrect use of adjectives or words). Remove duplicate words and correct word order for clarity.

× Oh, definitely I choose a comfortable shoe because it's help me to can run.

✓ Oh, definitely I choose comfortable shoes because they help me run.

Verb form 'help' with third person plural subject requires 'help' (no -s) when subject 'they' is used; original 'it's help' is incorrect (problem type 2). Also pronoun and number: use 'comfortable shoes' and 'they help' rather than 'a comfortable shoe' and 'it's'. Remove modal error 'to can run' and use 'help me run'.

× You can stay along over a long time.

✓ You can stay comfortable for a long time.

Incorrect preposition and adverb usage: 'stay along over a long time' is ungrammatical; use 'for a long time' and adjust verb 'stay comfortable' to convey meaning (problem type 11 and 20).

× but some location or some event, I choose the small shoe to help my outfit become like better and it's fake me gift like that.

✓ But for some occasions or events, I choose smaller shoes to make my outfit look better; they also make me feel more confident.

Pronoun and article errors: 'the small shoe' should be 'smaller shoes' and 'some location' is better as 'occasions or events' (problem type 12). 'it's fake me gift' is incoherent; interpret as 'they make me feel' and correct to 'they make me feel more confident'. Ensure adjective order and clearer phrasing (problem types 18 and 26).