Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more clearly and organize your response: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear supporting details. Correct grammar and avoid repetition. For example, say how often you buy shoes (e.g. every three months), give a reason (e.g. I don't go out much), and include a linking word (because/so). Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: I don't buy shoes very often; I usually buy a new pair every three months because I don't go out much. As a result, my shoes don't wear out quickly, so I can keep them for a long time.

제안: Provide a concise, well-structured answer: start with a clear yes/no and then give one or two specific details using linking words (for example/so/therefore). Correct verb forms and avoid hesitation words. Mention when and why you buy online and a brief result or benefit.

예시: Yes, I have. When I played on the basketball team, I often bought basketball shoes online because they were easier to find in the right size. This was convenient for my mother and me, and it saved time compared to going to the shops.

제안: Answer with a clear figure and explain briefly why, using correct currency and grammar. Avoid filler words and vague numbers. Use one linking word (because/so) and one specific reason (quality/durability/style).

예시: I usually spend about ¥1,000 on a pair of shoes because I prefer high-quality, durable shoes that last a long time. Although they are expensive, I think the cost is worth it for the comfort and strength.

제안: Give a clear preference with a topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words (but/so/therefore). Avoid repeating words and correct grammar. If you prefer both, explain how you balance them (e.g., wear comfortable shoes for work and fashionable ones for events).

예시: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes. For work I choose comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet a lot, but for social events I wear stylish shoes to match my outfit. This way I balance comfort and appearance.

× 'Actually, I don't buy shoes, so I buy them once for three months because I don't go out through frequency on the I don't like working so my shoes don't be get old.'

✓ 'Actually, I don't buy shoes often; I buy them once every three months because I don't go out frequently and I don't work much, so my shoes don't get worn out.'

'Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure errors: original contains awkward phrasing and incorrect verb forms ("don't be get old"). Use 'often' and 'frequently' for adverbial frequency, 'once every three months' for a single purchase period, and the correct verb phrase 'don't get worn out'. Also break into clearer clauses to improve sentence structure.'

× 'Yes, I have uh, when I was belong to the basketball team, I always wear the basketball shoes.'

✓ 'Yes, I have. When I belonged to the basketball team, I always wore basketball shoes.'

'Tense and verb form errors: "was belong" is incorrect. Use the past tense 'belonged'. Also change present tense 'wear' to past tense 'wore' to match the time frame. Separate the response into two sentences for clarity.'

× 'So if the shoes was broken, I buy it the same things at the on at on the on the Internet.'

✓ 'So if the shoes were broken, I bought the same ones on the Internet.'

'Subject-verb agreement and past tense errors: use 'were' for plural 'shoes' in the past subjunctive/conditional context and 'bought' for past action. Replace 'it the same things' with 'the same ones' and correct preposition to 'on the Internet'.'

× 'It is very useful for us, I, my mother and I.'

✓ 'It was very useful for my mother and me.'

'Incorrect pronoun case and tense: list of people should use objective case 'my mother and me'. Also match tense to previous sentence (past) by using 'was'. Remove redundant 'I,'.'

× 'I usually spend my money on 50,000 Hun ¥1000 umm because it is expensive and uh very strong for so I think these shoes are expensive.'

✓ 'I usually spend about 50,000 Hunnanese yen (¥1000) because they are expensive and very durable, so I think these shoes are costly.'

'Number/quantifier and agreement issues plus adjective use: clarify amount with 'about' and correct currency name and symbol placement. Use plural 'they' to refer to shoes, not 'it'. Replace 'very strong' with 'very durable' and 'expensive' with 'costly' to avoid repetition. Ensure verbs and nouns agree.'

× 'I prefer both because I my SH my Rex always be tired if I work too much but I like keep out my outfit beauty so I would like to wear the stylish 1.'

✓ 'I prefer both because my feet always get tired if I work too much, but I also like to keep my outfit looking nice, so I like to wear stylish shoes.'

'Sentence structure and vocabulary errors: unclear fragments like "I my SH my Rex" and 'be tired' should be 'my feet always get tired'. Use 'keep my outfit looking nice' for natural phrasing. Replace 'stylish 1' with 'stylish shoes'. Ensure parallel structure with 'but I also... so I like...'.

× 'So I would like to select both.'

✓ 'So I would like to choose both.'

'Word choice and register: 'select' is formal and less natural in this context; 'choose' is more natural for personal preference. Keep tense and meaning consistent.'