Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は明確で自然ですが、いくつかの改善点があります。まず、文の長さは適切ですが“drivers”が靴の種類として少し曖昧で、聞き手に伝わりにくい可能性があります（例えば“loafer”や“driving shoes”などを使うと良い）。また、理由を示していますが、具体的な例や頻度の背景（なぜ年に1回なのか、以前はどうだったか）を一文で付け加えると内容がより豊かになります。接続表現は適切に使われていますが、例えば“because”以外に“so”や“therefore”を使って変化を付けるとより自然です。

예시: I don't enjoy shopping for shoes and usually buy a new pair about once a year. I prefer classic leather shoes for work because they look professional and last longer, so I tend to choose loafers or driving shoes in simple styles rather than following trends.

제안: 回答は自然で理由も明確です。ただし“try them more in a store”の表現は改良の余地があります（“try them on in a store”が正確）。具体性を高めるために、オンラインで買って良かった点や失敗した経験を一つ短く加えると説得力が増します。また“worried that that size”のように“that”が重複しているので注意してください。

예시: Yes, I have, but only for casual shoes. For example, I recently bought a pair of sneakers online that turned out very comfortable, but for leather or formal shoes I prefer to try them on in a store because I'm concerned the size and fit can differ online.

제안: 回答の基本は良いですが、明らかな語彙ミスがあり、意味が通りにくい部分があります（“need them to be troubled”は不自然で、おそらく“durable”または“comfortable”の誤り）。このような語彙ミスを避けるために、簡潔で正確な単語を選んでください。また価格に関する裏付け（例えば具体的なブランドや経験）を一文加えると説得力が増します。

예시: I usually spend around ¥30,000 on a pair because I need them to be durable and comfortable for work. Cheaper shoes tend to wear out quickly, so I prefer investing in higher-quality brands that can last several years.

제안: とても明確で論理的な回答です。主張と理由がはっきりしており、因果関係も示されています。ただし“effects my performance”は語形の誤りで、“affects my performance”が正しいです。さらに具体性を高めるために、どの程度歩くかや快適さのために重視する要素（クッション性やサポート）を一文加えるとより良いでしょう。

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because my job involves a lot of walking—about several kilometers a day. If my shoes are uncomfortable, I lose concentration and get tired faster, which affects my performance, so I look for good cushioning and arch support rather than fashionable looks.

× For that reason, I focus on drivers and simple styles rather than following the trends.

✓ For that reason, I focus on drivers and simple styles rather than following trends.

The phrase 'following the trends' is not ungrammatical, but in this context 'following trends' is more natural and concise. Remove the definite article 'the' before 'trends' to match typical collocation. Suggestion: use 'following trends' to sound more fluent.

× However, for leather or formal shoes, I prefer to try them more in a store because I'm worried that that size and fit might be different when you buy online.

✓ However, for leather or formal shoes, I prefer to try them in a store because I'm worried that the size and fit might be different when you buy online.

There is a repeated 'that that' which is incorrect. Also 'try them more in a store' is awkward; use 'try them in a store'. Replace 'that that' with a single 'that' and remove 'more' to improve clarity.

× I usually spend around ¥30,000 on a pair of shoes because I need them to be troubled and comfortable for work.

✓ I usually spend around ¥30,000 on a pair of shoes because I need them to be durable and comfortable for work.

The word 'troubled' is incorrect here; the intended adjective is 'durable' meaning long-lasting. Replace 'troubled' with 'durable' to convey the correct meaning.

× If my shoes are uncomfortable, I lose concentration and get tired more quickly, which effects my performance at work.

✓ If my shoes are uncomfortable, I lose concentration and get tired more quickly, which affects my performance at work.

The noun 'effects' is used incorrectly; the correct verb is 'affects' to indicate an action influencing performance. Use 'affects' (verb) instead of 'effects' (noun) to fix the error.