Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so"). Also correct small phrasing issues (e.g., "when I can afford them").

예시: I do like buying shoes, but I rarely buy them because most of mine are gifts from my sisters. However, I purchase shoes occasionally when I really need them or when I can afford them.

제안: Be specific and correct grammar (singular/plural). Use linking words to list reasons, and avoid unclear words like "confidence"—use "comfortable" or "stylish". Keep it to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I recently bought a pair of Anta shoes online. I like them because they are a stylish color, comfortable to wear, and good value for money.

제안: Provide a clear currency format and avoid minor errors (e.g., "$100 to $150" or "100 to 150 dollars"). Offer a brief reason or example to support the amount using a linking word such as "because" or "so".

예시: I usually spend about $100 to $150 on a pair of shoes because I prefer budget-friendly options that are comfortable for everyday wear.

제안: Good content and coherence. To improve, combine sentences to be more concise and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "walk comfortably" instead of "walk confidently" if you mean physical comfort). Add a short example to make it more specific.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because they let me walk comfortably and avoid pain; however, I often choose styles that are both comfortable and stylish, such as cushioned sneakers with a simple, modern design.

× I only buy shoes occasionally, especially when I need it or when I can afford it.

✓ I only buy shoes occasionally, especially when I need them or when I can afford them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers back to 'shoes' (plural). Use the plural pronoun 'them' to match the plural noun. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× Yes, I actually recently bought one online and its brand was Anta.

✓ Yes, I actually recently bought a pair online and its brand was Anta.

The word 'one' is ambiguous for shoes; 'a pair' is more natural because shoes come in pairs. 'Its' is acceptable for 'pair', but using 'a pair' clarifies reference. Suggestion: Use 'a pair' when referring to shoes to match number and natural usage.

× I like it so much, it's color, it's confidence and also it is very affordable and of good quality.

✓ I like it so much: its color, its comfort, and it is also very affordable and of good quality.

The original uses 'it's' (contraction of 'it is') incorrectly where the possessive 'its' is needed, and 'confidence' is incorrect for a shoe attribute — 'comfort' fits. Also punctuation and structure need adjustment for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'its' for possession, choose appropriate nouns for attributes, and keep parallel structure in lists.

× I usually spend about 100 to $150 on shoes.

✓ I usually spend about $100 to $150 on shoes.

Number format inconsistency: '100 to $150' mixes a bare number with a dollar-formatted number. Prepend '$' to both or write 'between $100 and $150'. Suggestion: Use consistent currency formatting or 'between ... and ...' for ranges.

× I try not to splurge because I prefer budget friendly options that are comfortable for everyday wear.

✓ I try not to splurge because I prefer budget-friendly options that are comfortable for everyday wear.

Compound adjective 'budget-friendly' requires a hyphen when placed before a noun. Suggestion: Hyphenate compound adjectives used attributively.