Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct collocations (e.g. "incredible experience", "newly launched"), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail about frequency to make your answer concrete.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair every three to six months, especially when there is a new release I like. I tend to match shoes with my outfits, so I often buy shoes to go with clothes I have recently bought.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, use correct tense and plural forms, and organise details with linking words (e.g. "however", "although"). Be specific about how often and what happened when you received damaged goods. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online, mainly from Amazon. Overall it has been a positive experience; however, a couple of times I received damaged pairs. Fortunately, the seller replaced them quickly, so it was not a major problem.

제안: Give a clear overview then two concrete examples with correct numbers and currency format. Avoid hesitation and unclear phrases. Use linking words ("for example", "on the other hand") and keep sentences short and precise. Clarify currency and typical price ranges.

예시: It depends on the purpose. For formal events I buy branded shoes that usually cost around 5,000 to 6,000 rupees. On the other hand, casual or home shoes are much cheaper — typically about 200 to 300 rupees.

제안: State your preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid overgeneralised claims ("lots of compelling evidence"); instead, give personal experience or a simple reason. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones. For example, as someone who exercises regularly, I find that good trainers protect my feet and joints, so I choose comfort to avoid pain and injuries.

× Definitely, yes, I am fond of buying shoes and it's, uh, incredibly experienced to get a new pair of shoes, which is recently launched at the market.

✓ Definitely yes, I am fond of buying shoes, and it's incredibly exciting to get a new pair of shoes that was recently launched on the market.

The student used 'experienced' incorrectly; 'experienced' describes a person, not an event. The correct adjective is 'exciting'. Also 'which is recently launched at the market' has wrong tense and preposition: use 'that was recently launched on the market' to indicate a recent launch. Suggestion: replace 'experienced' with 'exciting' and change clause to 'that was recently launched on the market'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Moreover, I'm buying my clothes frequently and habitual to wear a matching pair of shoes, so I have to buy the shoes, uh, depend upon the clothes.

✓ Moreover, I buy clothes frequently and am accustomed to wearing a matching pair of shoes, so I have to buy shoes depending on the clothes.

Phrases 'I'm buying my clothes frequently' and 'habitual to wear' are unidiomatic. Use simple present 'I buy clothes frequently' for habitual actions. 'Habitual to wear' should be 'am accustomed to wearing' (correct verb + -ing). 'Depend upon' should be 'depending on'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct collocations: 'am accustomed to wearing' and 'depending on'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Most of the shopping I'm doing online, that's why I bought all the shoes on Amazon and it is always an incredible experience.

✓ Most of my shopping I do online; that's why I buy all my shoes on Amazon and it is always an incredible experience.

Mixes present continuous 'I'm doing' with past 'I bought'. For habitual actions use simple present: 'I do' and 'I buy'. Also 'Most of the shopping' should be 'Most of my shopping'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines: 'Most of my shopping I do online; that's why I buy all my shoes on Amazon.' Grammar problem type ID:6

× But a couple of time I got damaged pair of shoes, but that was not a big issue.

✓ But a couple of times I received a damaged pair of shoes, but that was not a big issue.

Use plural 'times' after 'a couple of'. 'Got' is informal and ambiguous; 'received' or 'was sent' is clearer. Also 'damaged pair of shoes' needs an article: 'a damaged pair of shoes'. Suggestion: say 'a couple of times I received a damaged pair of shoes'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× It was replaced by the company.

✓ It was replaced by the company.

Sentence is grammatically correct but acceptable style note: you could say 'The company replaced it' for active voice, which is more natural in speech. No grammatical correction required. Grammar problem type ID:21

× Otherwise I had good experience.

✓ Otherwise I have had a good experience.

Student used past tense 'had' inconsistently with general evaluation of experience. Use present perfect 'have had' to indicate experience up to now. Also include article 'a'. Suggestion: use 'I have had a good experience.' Grammar problem type ID:6

× It depends upon the purpose totally.

✓ It totally depends on the purpose.

Word order is awkward: adverb 'totally' should precede or follow 'depends'. Use 'depends on' rather than 'depends upon' for informal speech. Suggestion: 'It totally depends on the purpose.' Grammar problem type ID:14

× If I'm presenting myself at the event or in the organization, I always opt formal and branded one that might cost uh around 5 to 6000.

✓ If I'm presenting myself at an event or at work, I always choose formal, branded shoes that might cost around 5,000 to 6,000.

Use 'choose' rather than 'opt' plus noun; 'opt for' would be needed otherwise. 'Formal and branded one' is incorrect: use plural 'shoes' or 'shoes that are formal and branded'. Also specify numbers with commas and correct range. 'At the event or in the organization' is awkward: use 'at an event or at work'. Suggestion: 'I always choose formal, branded shoes that might cost around 5,000 to 6,000.' Grammar problem type ID:13

× Or if I want to wear them for regular activities, especially at the home, then I go for practical 1 and it'll hardly cost 203 hundred for me.

✓ If I want to wear them for regular activities, especially at home, I go for practical ones, and they will hardly cost 200 to 300 for me.

'At the home' should be 'at home'. 'Practical 1' seems to be a typo for 'practical ones'. '203 hundred' is invalid; likely intended '200-300'. Use 'they will' or contraction 'they'll' for plural. Suggestion: correct to 'practical ones' and give a clear price range '200 to 300'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

✓ Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?

Question is acceptable as is. No grammatical correction needed. Use of articles is correct because plural nouns don't need articles. No change required. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I'm into health and sports as well, so I always go for comfortable rather than fashionable or stylish shoes, and there are lots of compelling evidence that good sports shoes or trainer keep bone and joints much more healthy than wearing uncomfortable fashionable style shoes, so I always prefer.

✓ I'm into health and sports as well, so I always choose comfortable rather than fashionable shoes, and there is a lot of compelling evidence that good sports shoes or trainers keep bones and joints much healthier than wearing uncomfortable, fashionable-style shoes, so I always prefer them.

Multiple issues: 'go for' is acceptable but 'choose' is clearer. 'There are lots of compelling evidence' is wrong: 'evidence' is uncountable so use 'there is a lot of evidence' or 'many pieces of evidence'. 'Trainer' should be plural 'trainers'. 'Keep bone and joints' needs plural 'bones and joints'. 'Much more healthy' is awkward; use comparative 'much healthier'. 'Uncomfortable fashionable style shoes' needs hyphenation and commas: 'uncomfortable, fashionable-style shoes'. Add pronoun 'them' at end. Suggestion: use 'there is a lot of evidence', plural nouns where needed, and comparative form 'healthier'. Grammar problem type ID:16}]} PMID:13