Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сформулируйте главный ответ кратко и затем добавьте одно-два конкретных объяснения. Избегайте повторов (например, не повторяйте мысль о высокой цене несколько раз). Улучшите связность, используя связки (for example, so, because, therefore). Также сократите ответ до максимум четырёх предложений и уточните детали (как часто — точный режим использования).

예시: I don't enjoy buying shoes; I usually order them online because prices in local shops are high. For example, I typically wear one pair for about five months, so I prefer to invest in durable, well-priced shoes. Therefore I avoid frequent shopping and only replace shoes when they wear out.

제안: Дайте прямой ответ и добавьте конкретные детали о процессе покупки: как выбираете размер, какие сайты или бренды, как проверяете качество. Используйте связующие слова (for example, usually, because, therefore) и избегайте повторов предыдущих утверждений. Сократите до максимум трёх предложений.

예시: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because local shops are expensive. For example, I order from European websites and carefully check size charts and customer reviews to make sure the fit is right. I also prefer brands with free returns to reduce the risk.

제안: Исправьте ошибку с «minutes» на «dollars/euros» и укажите конкретную сумму валюты. Дайте ясную структуру: прямой ответ (сумма + валюта), затем краткое объяснение, почему такая сумма. Избегайте лишних деталей о происхождении товара в этом ответе или сведите их к одной фразе.

예시: I usually spend about 50 to 60 euros on a pair of shoes. I choose that price range because European and Turkish online stores offer good quality at reasonable prices.

제안: Отвечайте прямо и дайте одно-два конкретных объяснения с логическими связками. Уточните, что вы подразумеваете под «comfortable» (поддержка, материал, подошва) и приведите пример. Избегайте общих фраз и постарайтесь не превышать три предложений.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear each pair for many months and need good support and durable materials. For instance, I look for cushioned insoles and sturdy soles that I can wear every day rather than fashionable shoes that suit only certain outfits.

× I prefer to order them because in our country they put higher prices for it.

✓ I prefer to order them because in our country they charge higher prices for them.

The original uses 'put higher prices for it' which is incorrect collocation. Use 'charge higher prices for' or 'sell them at higher prices'. Also pronoun agreement: 'them' for shoes (plural). Use 'for them' not 'for it'. Suggestion: say 'they charge higher prices for them' or 'they sell them at higher prices'.

× So I don't think that's a good idea to buy it.

✓ So I don't think it's a good idea to buy them.

Unnatural phrase 'that's a good idea to buy it' — use 'it's a good idea to buy them' or 'to buy shoes'. Pronoun 'it' mismatches plural 'shoes'. Also 'think it's a good idea to...' is the correct structure. Suggestion: use 'I don't think it's a good idea to buy them' or 'I don't think buying shoes there is a good idea.'

× And actually I don't change shoes that often because I wear one pair of shoes maybe for five months, then I change it to a new pair.

✓ Actually, I don't change shoes that often because I wear one pair of shoes for maybe five months, then I change them for a new pair.

Use 'them' for plural 'shoes' rather than 'it'. Also word order: 'for maybe five months' or 'maybe for five months'. Use 'change them for' or 'replace them with' a new pair. Suggestion: 'I wear one pair of shoes for about five months, then I replace them with a new pair.'

× I always buy shoes online because, as I said, our shops put higher prices on it and I don't understand the reason.

✓ I always buy shoes online because, as I said, our shops charge higher prices for them and I don't understand the reason.

Use 'charge higher prices for them' instead of 'put higher prices on it'. Pronoun 'it' should be 'them'. Also 'always buy' is fine present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: 'our shops charge higher prices for shoes' or 'sell them at higher prices'.

× So I try to fit and understand my size of my shoes and I order it from Europe.

✓ So I try to determine and understand my shoe size and I order them from Europe.

'fit and understand my size of my shoes' is unidiomatic. Use 'determine my shoe size' or 'make sure of my shoe size'. Pronoun 'it' should be 'them' referring to shoes. Suggestion: 'I try to determine my shoe size and then I order shoes from Europe.'

× I usually spend 50 or 60 minutes because I order it online from Europe or from Turkey because they have good prices on it, not like in our shops, so that's a relief.

✓ I usually spend 50 or 60 euros because I order shoes online from Europe or Turkey since they have good prices, unlike our shops, so it's a relief.

The student wrote 'minutes' but likely meant money; replace with 'euros' or relevant currency. Pronoun 'it' should be 'them' or refer to 'shoes'. Also use 'unlike our shops' not 'not like in our shops'. Suggestion: 'I usually spend 50 or 60 euros because I order shoes online from Europe or Turkey; prices are better than in our shops.'

× I prefer comfortable shoes because as I know myself, I will wear one pair of shoes for six months and I don't like to waste money to unknown fabric.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because, as I know myself, I will wear one pair for six months and I don't like to waste money on unknown fabrics.

Use 'wear one pair' (omit repeated 'of shoes') or 'one pair of shoes'. Preposition 'on' is correct for 'waste money on'. 'Unknown fabric' should be plural 'unknown fabrics' or 'an unknown fabric' depending on meaning. Suggestion: 'I don't like to waste money on shoes made of unknown materials.'

× Gorgeous with interesting design shoes and fashionable shoes you can wear with certain outfits and they are not suitable for every day.

✓ Gorgeous, uniquely designed shoes and fashionable shoes can be worn with certain outfits, but they are not suitable for everyday use.

Original word order is awkward. 'Gorgeous with interesting design shoes' should be 'gorgeous, uniquely designed shoes'. Add conjunction 'but' and 'everyday use' for clarity. Suggestion: 'Gorgeous, fashion-forward shoes might match certain outfits but are not suitable for everyday wear.'