Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to explain frequency and preferences. Keep it within 2–4 concise sentences and provide specific details about occasions and what you look for in shoes.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I usually buy them only for special occasions such as weddings or religious festivals. For these events I prefer shoes that match my outfit and are trendy in colour and style, rather than everyday shoes.

제안: Use present perfect or present simple consistently, avoid filler phrases, and connect ideas with linking words. Mention specific websites or reasons (convenience, selection, price) to make your answer more informative and coherent.

예시: Yes, I often buy shoes online because there are many websites with a wide selection and good prices. For example, before Eid or weddings I check a few trusted sites so I can quickly compare styles and have shoes delivered before the event.

제안: Start with a clear statement about typical spending, give a specific range or example, and explain reasons concisely. Remove hesitations and repeated words; use linking words to structure the explanation.

예시: I don't spend a lot on shoes; typically I spend between $20 and $50 on a pair because I already own several that match most outfits. Therefore I usually buy one or two versatile pairs in neutral colours like black or white.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then use linking words to contrast preferences by situation. Be specific about occasions when you choose fashion over comfort and vice versa, and avoid hesitations and repetition.

예시: It depends on the situation, but I generally prefer comfortable shoes for everyday activities. However, for formal events or parties I will choose fashionable heels or dress shoes to match my outfit.

× Yes, I often bought shoes from online.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes online.

The student used 'bought' (past) but context indicates habitual action; use present simple 'buy'. Also 'from online' is incorrect preposition use; say 'buy online' or 'from online stores'. Use 'often' with present simple for habits.

× There is a lot of sites where I can get my shoes done.

✓ There are a lot of sites where I can buy shoes.

Subject-verb agreement and quantifier: 'sites' is plural, so use 'there are' not 'there is'. 'Get my shoes done' is unnatural here; use 'buy shoes'. Also 'a lot of' is fine with plural noun.

× I prefer to. I almost prefer to buy shoes on like Eid or some weddings.

✓ I prefer to. I usually prefer to buy shoes for Eid or for some weddings.

Use 'usually' instead of 'almost' for habitual frequency. Preposition 'for' is better than 'on' for events like Eid/weddings. Keep present simple 'prefer' for habits.

× So it's helpful to just check and buy online it.

✓ So it's helpful to just check and buy online.

The pronoun 'it' is redundant and incorrectly placed. Omit 'it' after 'buy online' to make the sentence grammatical.

× I don't usually spend much money on my shoes, uh, because I have lot of shoes with the, with, with so many dresses, like I can be a black shoes with my other outfits with my uh, so, so I prefer to keep one or two shoes like, uh, including colours, black, white.

✓ I don't usually spend much money on shoes because I have a lot of shoes to match many dresses. For example, I can have black shoes to go with my other outfits, so I prefer to keep one or two pairs in colours like black and white.

Errors include missing article: 'a lot of shoes' needs 'a'; 'black shoes' singular/plural mismatch and awkward phrasing. Use 'pairs' when counting shoes and 'have a lot of' for quantity. Clarify sentence structure and use parallel phrasing.

× It's depend upon the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires third person singular 'depends' not 'depend'. Use 'on' rather than 'upon' for natural spoken English (both are correct but 'on' is more common).

× So it's depend, uh, you know, I can wear, but I can wear both comfortable if I am going to, uh, outings or to visit some places like history.

✓ So it depends, you know. I can wear comfortable shoes, but I can wear both if I am going on outings or visiting historical places.

Use 'depends' for third person singular. 'Wear both comfortable' is awkward — say 'wear comfortable shoes' or 'wear both types'. Use 'go on outings' and 'visiting historical places' for correct verb forms and collocations.