Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect forms (e.g., use singular/plural correctly).

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I have a varied collection because I like matching shoes to different outfits, so I often buy a new pair when a trend catches my eye. For example, I usually visit the market once a month and pick one pair that suits my current wardrobe.

제안: Reduce hesitations and improve clarity: give a direct answer, then two specific reasons with linking words. Correct comparative phrasing and prepositions (e.g., 'cheaper than buying in the country' or 'cheaper than in stores').

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online twice. The shoes were high quality, and I prefer shopping online because prices are usually lower and delivery is convenient. For instance, I saved about 20% compared with local shops.

제안: Give a clear numeric answer and explain with specific details. Use correct sentence structure and linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Avoid filler words.

예시: I usually spend no more than 2,000 (local currency) on a pair of shoes because I buy from a reliable shop in my hometown that often offers discounts. Therefore, I can get good-quality shoes without spending much.

제안: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then contrast with an exception using linking words such as 'however' or 'but'. Be concise and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'casual wear' not 'wears').

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday wear because I commute to work and need support and comfort. However, for special occasions I choose fashionable shoes to match my outfit and look more formal.

× I have different collection of shoes.

✓ I have a different collection of shoes.

The noun 'collection' is singular and requires the determiner 'a' before it. Use 'a different collection' to indicate one collection that is different. Suggestion: include the article 'a' before singular countable nouns.

× I have a different shoes that goes with my different outfits.

✓ I have different shoes that go with my different outfits.

The noun 'shoes' is plural, so the relative clause must use the plural verb 'go' not 'goes'. Also 'a different shoes' is incorrect because 'a' is for singular; remove 'a' when the noun is plural. Suggestion: match determiners to noun number and ensure verb agrees with plural nouns.

× Every shoes, which is a new trend.

✓ Every pair of shoes is a new trend.

'Every' is followed by a singular noun, so 'shoes' must be made singular in a suitable form such as 'pair of shoes'. The original sentence fragments and misuses the relative clause. Suggestion: say 'Every pair of shoes is a new trend' or 'Every shoe is part of a new trend.'

× I used to buy that shoe.

✓ I used to buy those shoes.

Context indicates habitual past purchases of plural items; 'that shoe' (singular) is inconsistent with earlier plural references. Use plural 'those shoes' to refer to shoes in general. Suggestion: align singular/plural references with context.

× Whenever I go in a market, I buy a pair of shoes.

✓ Whenever I go to the market, I buy a pair of shoes.

Use 'go to the market' rather than 'go in a market' when indicating visiting a place. Also 'the market' is more natural when referring to shopping in general. Suggestion: use 'to' for movement toward locations.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online, uh, twice.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online twice.

Remove filler sounds for clarity; the present perfect 'have bought' is correct for experiences. This item mainly needed punctuation and filler removal. Suggestion: keep responses concise.

× I often look forward for buying more shoes online uh.

✓ I often look forward to buying more shoes online.

The correct collocation is 'look forward to' followed by a gerund. 'Look forward for' is incorrect. Suggestion: memorize common verb-preposition combinations like 'look forward to'.

× Moreover, the price uh, I get online is very convenient and cheaper than I buying the county.

✓ Moreover, the price I get online is very reasonable and cheaper than buying them locally.

Original has unclear structure and incorrect comparative phrase. 'The price I get online' is fine; use 'cheaper than buying them locally' for comparison. 'I buying the county' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'buying in the country' or 'buying locally'. Suggestion: restructure the sentence and use correct comparative construction 'cheaper than' followed by a gerund phrase or noun.

× I don't spend much on shoes.

✓ I don't spend much on shoes.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Kept for completeness. Suggestion: none.

× I usually have shoes which are in range of 2000 and below.

✓ I usually buy shoes that cost 2000 or less.

Phrase 'in range of 2000 and below' is awkward. Use 'cost 2000 or less' to express price range. Also change 'have' to 'buy' to match intended meaning. Suggestion: use concise comparative price expressions like 'cost X or less.'

× I have a shop in my hometown that uh, from where I frequently buy shoes and it offers a great deal to me.

✓ There is a shop in my hometown from where I frequently buy shoes; it offers me great deals.

Original mixes clauses awkwardly. Use 'There is a shop' or 'I have a shop' consistently. 'Offers a great deal to me' is better as 'offers me great deals'. Suggestion: simplify clause order and use natural collocations like 'offers me great deals.'

× I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes for casual wears as I have to go to my workplace so there I need to wear casual shoes for the sake of comfort and while in occasions I prefer to wear a fashionable shoes as per my dress.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones for everyday wear because I go to work and need comfort; on special occasions I prefer to wear fashionable shoes to match my outfit.

Multiple issues: 'casual wears' should be 'everyday wear' or 'casual wear' (uncountable), 'fashionable shoes' repeated can be replaced with 'fashionable ones', and 'a fashionable shoes' is wrong article usage. Sentence run-on needs splitting. Suggestion: use 'ones' to avoid repetition, use uncountable 'wear', and split into two clauses for clarity.