Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence about whether you like buying shoes, then give one or two specific supporting details (frequency and a recent purchase) using correct grammar and natural phrasing. Use linking words sparingly to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., avoid repeating 'shoes' and 'colour' awkwardly). Also correct grammar (plural/singular and verb tense) and word order.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them a few times a year, and recently I bought a pair of black shoes that matched a dress for an event. I was very pleased because they fit well and looked smart.

제안: Clarify intent and correct vocabulary: begin with a direct 'Yes' or 'No', then give a short reason and one specific detail (where, colour, platform). Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'enjoy punching' is incorrect). Use linking words like 'because' correctly and keep sentences shorter and grammatically correct.

예시: Yes, I have. Recently I bought a light yellow pair of shoes online from Myntra because I couldn't find that colour in local stores.

제안: Give a clear, concise amount and explain briefly: start with a direct statement of your usual spending range, then add a short reason if needed. Use correct number formatting and prepositions (e.g., 'up to 3,000 or 4,000 rupees' or 'around $30–$40' depending on currency). Avoid repetition of 'shoes'.

예시: I usually save money, but when I do buy shoes I spend up to 3,000–4,000 rupees on a good pair because I prefer durable and comfortable footwear.

제안: Answer directly and give one or two clear reasons using natural phrasing and linking words. Replace awkward phrasing ('comforting') with 'comfort' and avoid starting sentences with 'Because' unnecessarily. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and include a brief example or result of the preference.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I don't want to sacrifice comfort for style. Comfortable shoes help me stay energetic and confident during long days, for example when I walk a lot at work.

× I really like to buy a different colour shoes and recently I have got a black colour shoes matching with my dress and I was so happy after buying it.

✓ I really like to buy shoes in different colours, and recently I got a pair of black shoes that matched my dress, so I was very happy after buying them.

The student used singular/plural inconsistently: 'a different colour shoes' and 'a black colour shoes' are incorrect. Use 'shoes' with quantifiers like 'a pair of' or use plural 'shoes in different colours'. Also changed 'have got' to simple past 'got' to match the past event and adjusted pronouns ('them') to agree with plural 'shoes'. Use 'matched' for correct relative clause. Suggested improvement: learn countable noun patterns (a pair of + shoes) and keep verb tense consistent for completed past actions.

× As I enjoy punching so recently I have bought one pair of shoes which was of light yellow colour from online at Myntra because I was unable to find offline so I bought shoes online.

✓ Because I enjoy shopping, I recently bought a pair of light yellow shoes online from Myntra because I was unable to find them in stores.

'Punching' is incorrect word choice; the intended verb is 'shopping' (present participle). The sentence also had awkward phrasing 'from online at Myntra' and tense inconsistency: use simple past 'bought' for a recent completed action. Use 'a pair of' for shoes and 'in stores' or 'offline' requires 'in' or 'at' fixed. Suggested improvement: choose correct verb ('shop'->'shopping'), use 'a pair of', and use simple past for completed recent actions.

× As I enjoy punching so recently I have bought one pair of shoes which was of light yellow colour from online at Myntra because I was unable to find offline so I bought shoes online.

✓ Because I enjoy shopping, I recently bought a pair of light yellow shoes online from Myntra because I was unable to find them offline.

Prepositions were misused: 'from online at Myntra' is incorrect; correct forms are 'online from Myntra' or 'from Myntra online'. Also 'find offline' needs an object and option 'find them offline'. Suggested improvement: place 'online' before or after the seller consistently and include pronouns when referring back to items.

× Usually I save money but whenever I buy shoes so I always buy shoes up to the limit of 3 or 4000.

✓ Usually I save money, but when I buy shoes I always spend up to the limit of 3 or 4 thousand.

The original sentence had redundant 'so' and article/number phrasing issues: 'up to the limit of 3 or 4000' is unclear. Use '3 or 4 thousand' (or specify currency) and 'spend' is more natural than 'buy shoes up to'. Also drop unnecessary articles. Suggested improvement: state currency and numbers clearly, remove filler words like 'so'.

× Usually I save money but whenever I buy shoes so I always buy shoes up to the limit of 3 or 4000.

✓ Usually I save money, but when I buy shoes I always spend up to a limit of 3 or 4 thousand.

The sentence structure is awkward due to repetition ('buy shoes' twice) and unnecessary 'so'. Rephrase to avoid repetition and make action clear: 'spend up to a limit'. Suggested improvement: combine clauses cleanly and avoid repeating the same noun.

× I prefer most comfortable shoes because I cannot compromise with comforting.

✓ I prefer the most comfortable shoes because I cannot compromise on comfort.

'Most comfortable' needs a determiner 'the' when comparing general preference. 'Compromise with comforting' is incorrect: use the noun 'comfort' and the preposition 'on' after 'compromise'. Suggested improvement: learn fixed expressions: 'compromise on something' and use correct noun forms ('comfort').

× Because when you wear comfortable shoes, you are more confident, you are more energetic.

✓ When you wear comfortable shoes, you feel more confident and more energetic.

Starting with 'Because when' is incorrect conjunction use; choose one connector. Also use 'feel' instead of 'are' for mental states and combine adjectives with 'and'. Suggested improvement: avoid stacking conjunctions and use appropriate verbs for states ('feel confident').

× I prefer most comfortable shoes because I cannot compromise with comforting.

✓ I prefer the most comfortable shoes because I cannot compromise on comfort.

No direct third-person singular verb error here; listed because original used 'compromise with' which is incorrect verb-preposition combination. Use 'compromise on' with noun 'comfort'. Suggested improvement: memorize verb-preposition collocations.