Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, ngữ pháp chính xác và gọn hơn. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sau đó bổ sung 1-2 câu chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lỗi động từ (ví dụ: use ‘enjoy’, ‘buy’, ‘match’) và từ vựng không đúng (‘fix’ → ‘match’, ‘chained’ không rõ nghĩa). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, and). Hạn chế tổng số câu không quá 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually go shopping for shoes on weekends because I have free time then. I like choosing styles that match my outfits, so I often look for shoes with neutral colors or simple designs.

제안: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và giải thích ngắn gọn lý do cụ thể, dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác (ví dụ: ‘I haven’t bought shoes online because…’). Tránh từ sai (‘by’ → ‘buy’; ‘fake my side’ unclear). Nên đưa 1-2 lý do rõ ràng như lo lắng về kích cỡ hoặc chất lượng và kết thúc bằng một câu liên kết.

예시: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because I prefer trying them on to check the size and comfort. I find it easier to judge quality in a store, so I usually buy shoes in person.

제안: Câu trả lời hiện tại lộn xộn và khó hiểu; cần trả lời trực tiếp về tầm giá và giải thích lý do rõ ràng. Sử dụng cấu trúc đơn giản: state an approximate amount or range, then give a short reason (brand, quality, frequency). Tránh từ không phù hợp (‘infamous’, ‘reset’). Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

예시: I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes. I’m willing to pay more for well-known brands because they tend to be more comfortable and durable. Occasionally I buy cheaper pairs for casual use.

제안: Cần nêu rõ sở thích (fashionable or comfortable) trong một câu, rồi giải thích lý do cụ thể. Tránh lỗi đại từ và câu khó hiểu. Dùng linking words (because, although) để liên kết lý do với ví dụ cá nhân. Giữ 2-3 câu súc tích.

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day. Although fashionable shoes look nice, comfort is more important to me for daily wear. Sometimes I choose styles that combine both comfort and a modern look.

× Yes, I very enjoy buying shoe which is fashion item.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes, which are fashion items.

'very' with 'enjoy' is incorrect; use 'really'. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' (singular/plural issue). 'Which is fashion item' has wrong article and agreement; use 'which are fashion items'. Use commas to separate clause. Advice: Use 'really enjoy' for emphasis and ensure noun-adjective agreement and pluralization.

× I often fix it with my outfit.

✓ I often match them with my outfits.

Pronoun and noun number mismatch: 'it' refers to 'shoes' (plural), so use 'them'. 'Outfit' can be plural if speaking generally. 'Fix' is unnatural here; 'match' is appropriate. Advice: Ensure pronouns agree in number and choose verbs that fit collocations (match outfits).

× I often buying shoe at the weekend when I have free time to update chained.

✓ I often buy shoes at the weekend when I have free time to update my collection.

Present simple required: 'I often buy' not 'I often buying'. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes'. 'Update chained' is incorrect phrase; likely 'update my collection'. Advice: Use base verb after adverbs of frequency and correct collocations.

× No, I think by shoe online is very difficult because I don't try to the fake my side and I often buying it in the store because I want to try it on my feet.

✓ No, I think buying shoes online is very difficult because I can't tell if they are fake, and I often buy them in stores because I want to try them on my feet.

'by shoe online' wrong word order; use 'buying shoes online'. 'Don't try to the fake my side' is unclear; intended meaning is 'can't tell if they are fake'. 'I often buying' should be 'I often buy'. Pronoun agreement: 'them'. Advice: Use correct verb forms, clearer phrasing for detecting fakes, and proper pronouns.

× Some shoe infamous brands are often spent a lot of money to buying it because I think it very beautiful and very suitable with price and I can't. Reset my new collection.

✓ Some infamous shoe brands are very expensive, so I often spend a lot of money buying them because I think they are very beautiful and worth the price when I add them to my new collection.

Many issues: 'Some shoe infamous brands' should be 'Some infamous shoe brands'. 'Are often spent a lot of money to buying it' incorrect—people spend money, so 'I often spend a lot of money buying them'. 'It very beautiful' needs 'they are very beautiful'. 'suitable with price' should be 'worth the price' or 'reasonable for the price'. 'I can't. Reset my new collection.' unclear; interpreted as adding to collection. Advice: Ensure correct subject-verb relations, pluralization, and idiomatic expressions for spending and value.

× I prefer to option because she is very diversity of Thai have both fashionable and comfortable so I very easy to find.

✓ I prefer that option because there is a wide variety in Thailand that is both fashionable and comfortable, so it is very easy for me to find shoes I like.

Pronoun misuse: 'she' is incorrect for 'option'. 'I prefer to option' should be 'I prefer that option' or 'I prefer this option'. 'Very diversity of Thai' should be 'a wide variety in Thailand'. Sentence structure and clarity improved. Advice: Use appropriate pronouns for non-human nouns ('it' or 'that option') and use nouns like 'variety' with articles.

× Shoe is very beautiful moreover is very comfortable to carry.

✓ The shoes are very attractive and also very comfortable to wear.

'Shoe' singular vs context plural: use 'the shoes' or 'shoes'. 'Beautiful' is okay but 'attractive' more natural. 'To carry' is wrong for wearing shoes; use 'to wear'. 'Moreover' is formal and awkward here; 'also' or 'and' fits. Advice: Match verbs to actions (wear not carry) and ensure noun number and natural connectors.