Shoes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. For example, say: "Yes, I love buying shoes. I usually purchase them on special occasions like weddings or ceremonies, but I rarely buy shoes for work."

예시: Yes, I love buying shoes. I usually purchase them on special occasions like weddings or ceremonies, but I rarely buy shoes for work.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using linking words and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons. For example: "Yes, I have bought shoes online. I like it because I can choose from many websites, but sometimes it's difficult since I cannot feel the material."

예시: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I like it because I can choose from many websites, but sometimes it's difficult since I cannot feel the material.

제안: Focus on answering the question directly and clearly. Use correct grammar and link your ideas logically. For example: "I usually spend a lot of money on shoes because comfort is important to me. Since I work long hours from 7 to 8, I need comfortable shoes."

예시: I usually spend a lot of money on shoes because comfort is important to me. Since I work long hours from 7 to 8, I need comfortable shoes.

제안: Answer directly and support your opinion with clear reasons using linking words. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage. For example: "I prefer comfortable shoes because I enjoy walking. Comfortable shoes are important for good health."

예시: I prefer comfortable shoes because I enjoy walking. Comfortable shoes are important for good health.

× Yeah, I like I love shopping, especially in shoes.

✓ Yeah, I like and love shopping, especially shoes.

The sentence incorrectly repeats the subject 'I' without conjunction. It should use 'and' to connect the verbs properly.

× I sometimes buy it in some occasion like ceremony or wedding.

✓ I sometimes buy them on occasions like ceremonies or weddings.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'. Also, 'occasion' should be plural 'occasions' and preposition 'on' is correct for events.

× I buy shoes very less when I want going to work.

✓ I buy shoes very rarely when I go to work.

'Very less' is incorrect; 'very rarely' is appropriate. Also, 'when I want going' is incorrect; it should be 'when I go'.

× Yeah, I did.

✓ Yes, I have.

The question is about experience, so present perfect 'have' is more appropriate than simple past 'did'.

× I sometimes buy a line I can choose from so many page, there is different between pages, but it is not good because I can see the shoes material.

✓ I sometimes buy online because I can choose from many pages; there are differences between pages, but it is not good because I cannot see the shoe materials.

'Buy a line' should be 'buy online'. 'So many page' should be 'many pages'. 'There is different' should be 'there are differences'. Also, 'can see' should be 'cannot see' to express the problem.

× The shoes are has too comfortable.

✓ The shoes are very comfortable.

'Are has' is incorrect; only 'are' is needed. Also, 'too comfortable' implies excessive comfort, 'very comfortable' is better.

× I expand too many too much money for shoes because I have to come for table with them.

✓ I spend too much money on shoes because I have to be comfortable with them.

'Expand' is incorrect; 'spend' is correct for money. 'Too many too much' is redundant; 'too much' is correct. 'Come for table' is incorrect; 'be comfortable' is appropriate.

× I'm going to work from 7:00 till 8:00.

✓ I go to work from 7:00 till 8:00.

Present continuous 'I'm going' is incorrect for habitual action; simple present 'I go' is appropriate.

× I working too much because of this I need a comfort.

✓ I work too much; because of this, I need comfort.

'I working' lacks auxiliary verb; should be 'I work'. 'A comfort' is incorrect; 'comfort' is uncountable.

× I prefer to have comfortable shoes because I'm walking.

✓ I prefer to have comfortable shoes because I walk a lot.

'I'm walking' suggests present continuous; 'I walk a lot' better expresses habitual action.

× I like walking I they should be comfortable because it's important for our healthy.

✓ I like walking; they should be comfortable because it's important for our health.

Sentence has pronoun confusion; 'I they' is incorrect. 'Healthy' is adjective; 'health' is noun and correct here.