Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "which has my knowledge" and "called to the library for waiting". Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library to read books and improve my knowledge. For instance, last Sunday I visited the library to borrow some academic books because I had tests on Monday.

제안: Your answer should be clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid unclear phrases like "which he has my skills." Also, try to be more specific and concise in your response.

예시: When I am free, I usually read biographies of famous personalities and books to improve my English skills. For example, on weekends I enjoy reading the biography of Abdul Kalam, which I find very interesting.

제안: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat confusing. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I used to go to the library when I was a kid at school. However, now the library is closed due to strict rules. In fourth grade, I enjoyed reading Punjabi books because I was fascinated by learning.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically. Avoid vague phrases like "from the various variety."

예시: Yes, Chinese children often go to the library to improve their skills. In my experience, many students use the library as a place to learn and develop themselves.

× Yes, I often go to the library for reading some books and which has my knowledge.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to read some books that increase my knowledge.

The phrase 'for reading' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'to read' to express purpose. Also, 'which has my knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'that increase my knowledge' to convey the intended meaning.

× For example recently on a Sunday I called to the library for waiting some academics books because my tests are going to held on a Monday.

✓ For example, recently on a Sunday I went to the library to wait for some academic books because my tests were going to be held on Monday.

The verb 'called to the library' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'went to the library'. 'For waiting' should be 'to wait for'. 'Academics books' should be 'academic books' (adjective form). 'Are going to held' is incorrect; it should be 'were going to be held' to match past tense and passive voice.

× Sometimes when I free, I read the biography of the famous personalities and also read English proficiency books which he has my skills.

✓ Sometimes when I am free, I read biographies of famous personalities and also read English proficiency books that improve my skills.

The phrase 'when I free' is missing the verb 'am'. 'Biography' should be plural 'biographies' to match 'famous personalities'. 'Which he has my skills' is incorrect; it should be 'that improve my skills' to express the intended meaning.

× For example on on weekends I usually go and read the Abdul Kalam biography which is very interesting.

✓ For example, on weekends I usually go and read the Abdul Kalam biography, which is very interesting.

The sentence has a repeated word 'on on' which is a typographical error. 'Biography' is singular and correctly used here. Added commas for clarity.

× Yes I go to the library when I was a kid in in the schools and now in my school the library was closed due to the strict rule rule and regulations and in my 4th class I went to read some Punjabi books because I have fascinated in learning.

✓ Yes, I went to the library when I was a kid in school, and now in my school the library is closed due to strict rules and regulations. In my 4th class, I went to read some Punjabi books because I am fascinated by learning.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'In in the schools' has repetition and should be 'in school'. 'Was closed' is correct for past, but 'now' indicates present, so 'is closed' is appropriate. 'Rule rule' is repeated and should be 'rules'. 'I have fascinated' is incorrect; it should be 'I am fascinated by'.

× Well, Chinese kid often go to the library to enhance their skills and the finest children are well developed in that part.

✓ Well, Chinese kids often go to the library to enhance their skills, and the finest children are well developed in that area.

'Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids' to agree with 'often go'. 'In that part' is awkward; 'in that area' is more appropriate.

× And from my experience, I see from the various variety where individuals can go to the library to learn their skills.

✓ From my experience, I have seen various situations where individuals go to the library to improve their skills.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'I see from the various variety' is incorrect; it should be 'I have seen various situations'. 'Learn their skills' is better expressed as 'improve their skills'.