Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, instead of repeating 'I go to library', say 'I usually visit the library with my friends for group projects and assignments.'

예시: I don't often go to the library because I don't enjoy reading books. However, I usually visit it with my friends to work on group projects and complete assignments related to my exams.

제안: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details using linking words. For example, explain what kind of projects you do and how the library helps you.

예시: I usually work on group projects in the library with my friends. For instance, in my revenue management class, we use the library resources to research and prepare our project assignments.

제안: Improve grammar by using past tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your experience.

예시: Yes, when I was a kid, I often went to the school library where I enjoyed reading picture books. Additionally, the library had games like puzzles and Ludo, which made it a fun place to visit.

제안: Avoid making generalizations and unsupported claims. Focus on answering the question directly with relevant and accurate information. Use linking words to organize your answer logically.

예시: Yes, I believe many Chinese kids often go to the library to study and read. From what I've seen in TV shows, they enjoy spending time there with friends, which helps them learn and have fun.

× Honestly I don't like to read books so I don't collaborate often.

✓ Honestly I don't like to read books so I don't go often.

The verb 'collaborate' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is to express going to the library often. 'Collaborate' is not appropriate in this context. Using 'go' correctly conveys the intended action.

× But yes for my group projects I I go to library with my friends just to complete my assignments or some project work related to my exams.

✓ But yes, for my group projects I go to the library with my friends just to complete my assignments or some project work related to my exams.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'library', the definite article 'the' is required.

× As I told you earlier, I go to library for my group project assignment.

✓ As I told you earlier, I go to the library for my group project assignment.

The phrase 'go to library' lacks the definite article 'the'. When referring to a specific place such as 'library', 'the' is necessary to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× So with my friends I always do my projects.

✓ So with my friends, I always do my projects.

A comma is needed after 'friends' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause, improving sentence clarity and flow.

× For example, I have a subject called revenue management. So we do we we do make the project basis on.

✓ For example, I have a subject called Revenue Management. So we make the project based on it.

The original sentence is repetitive and incomplete. Removing repeated words and completing the sentence with 'based on it' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, I still remember when I was a kid, I go to school library where I just read the picture books and there there were some games in that library, the games like puzzles, Ludo and some more mind game.

✓ Yes, I still remember when I was a kid, I went to the school library where I just read picture books and there were some games in that library, games like puzzles, Ludo and some other mind games.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. Also, 'school library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'There there' is repetitive and should be corrected to a single 'there'. 'Some more mind game' should be pluralized to 'some other mind games' for grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I think Chinese kids are more intelligent and they have a very sharp memories so yes they often go to library.

✓ Yes, I think Chinese kids are more intelligent and they have very sharp memories so yes they often go to the library.

'Memories' is plural and does not need 'a' before it. Also, 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the' before 'library' to be grammatically correct.

× I know these things because I watch K dramas where the Chinese kids go to library and enjoy reading books there with their friends and also they play K.

✓ I know these things because I watch K dramas where the Chinese kids go to the library and enjoy reading books there with their friends and also they play K.

Again, 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the'. Including 'the' before 'library' is necessary for correct grammar.