Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and redundancies. Try to give a direct response with clear sentence structure and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why and how often you go to the library, and mention the availability of online resources as a contrast.

예시: I sometimes go to the library, especially when I need to research academic journals or find detailed information. However, nowadays, I often use online resources because they are more convenient and accessible.

제안: Your answer has good content but is affected by hesitations and some unclear phrasing. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'so' correctly to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating words and focus on clear, concise sentences. For example, state what you do, why you do it, and how the library environment helps you.

예시: I usually look for journals and information related to my research topics in the library because it provides a quiet environment. This helps me concentrate better than in other places.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors and hesitations. Make sure to answer directly and clearly. Use proper sentence structure and avoid unnecessary repetition. For example, explain that you did not often go to the library as a child because your parents provided books at home and you preferred outdoor activities.

예시: I did not often go to the library as a child because my parents provided me with all the books I needed at home. Also, I spent more time doing outdoor activities than reading.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to give a clear opinion with supporting reasons. Use linking words to contrast different preferences among kids. For example, mention that some kids go to the library for a quiet study environment, while others prefer outdoor activities.

예시: Some Chinese kids often go to the library because they prefer a quiet and peaceful environment to study. However, others enjoy outdoor activities like sports and games instead.

× The library sometimes, like when I, whenever I have to need to do research on some, uh, about, uh, some journals or get need to more information.

✓ I sometimes go to the library when I need to do research on some journals or get more information.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'have to need to' which is redundant and awkward. The verb 'need' should be used alone without 'have to'. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and fragmented. Simplifying the sentence and using the correct verb form improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× So at that time I prefer to go to library.

✓ So at that time, I prefer to go to the library.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Omitting 'the' before 'library' is incorrect in this context.

× Uh, but uh, there are, as usual, uh, in nowadays we have lots of, in, uh, online information.

✓ But nowadays, we have lots of online information.

The phrase 'in nowadays' is incorrect; 'nowadays' is an adverb and does not require a preposition. Also, the sentence is fragmented and unclear; simplifying it improves clarity.

× In the library, I usually try to find out the journals and try to get more information about, uh, my research topic or something I need very important and, uh, because it's a quite, uh, quite a environment in the library.

✓ In the library, I usually try to find journals and get more information about my research topic or something very important because it's quite a quiet environment in the library.

The phrase 'try to find out the journals' is incorrect; 'find' is sufficient without 'out'. Also, 'quite a environment' should be 'quite a quiet environment' to correctly use the adjective and article. The sentence is also simplified for clarity.

× So I concentrated on my studies more easily and than any other, uh, other.

✓ So I concentrate on my studies more easily than anywhere else.

The original sentence uses past tense 'concentrated' inconsistently with the present habitual action. Also, 'than any other' is incomplete; 'than anywhere else' is clearer. The preposition 'on' is correctly used with 'concentrate'.

× He was always kid because, uh, my par, my parents, uh, gave me all the books that I need at home, so I didn't need to go to the library, uh, because I spend a lot of time in outdoor activities rather than going to library or reading books.

✓ I was always a kid because my parents gave me all the books that I needed at home, so I didn't need to go to the library because I spent a lot of time in outdoor activities rather than going to the library or reading books.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'He was always kid' instead of 'I was always a kid'. Also, 'need' should be in past tense 'needed' to match the past context. 'Spend' should be 'spent' for past tense consistency. The article 'a' is missing before 'kid' and before 'library' in the last phrase.

× Moreover, as I'm going to school, so I, I have all the books and.

✓ Moreover, since I go to school, I have all the books.

The phrase 'as I'm going to school, so' is awkward and redundant. 'Since I go to school' is a better conjunction phrase. The sentence is incomplete and is corrected for clarity and completeness.

× For a person that he or she need to go to the library because some people prefer to go to the library to and want to learn in the poet and calm environment where sometimes some people or kids prefer to go to the do the other outdoor activities like sports and playing games.

✓ A person who needs to go to the library does so because some people prefer to learn in a quiet and calm environment, while others prefer to do outdoor activities like sports and playing games.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage ('that he or she need'), missing articles ('the poet' should be 'a quiet'), and awkward phrasing. 'Need' should be 'needs' to agree with singular subject. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.