Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "No, actually, yeah" and "since due to the busy routine". Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like "because" or "so".

예시: I often go to the library because I have a busy schedule at home. Therefore, I sometimes visit the library to read novels and fiction books, as it provides a quiet environment for me to relax and enjoy reading.

제안: Improve coherence by using linking words and avoid repetition. Also, clarify your points with specific examples. For instance, instead of saying "all the adventural books," say "adventure books" and explain why you prefer them. Keep sentences clear and connected.

예시: In the library, I usually read fiction and adventure books because I find them exciting and engaging. I prefer these over magazines and newspapers since they offer a deeper and more enjoyable reading experience.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Avoid confusing phrases like "my mom brought all the irrelevant books for me." Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, try to be more specific about your experiences.

예시: I rarely went to the library as a child because my mother bought many books for me to read at home. However, I did visit my school library once or twice, and I enjoyed those visits even though they were not very frequent.

제안: Avoid vague statements and contradictions. If you are unsure, say so clearly and avoid guessing. Also, improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Try to focus on what you know or give a general opinion without confusing comparisons.

예시: I am not sure about Chinese children specifically, but generally, many children around the world enjoy going to the library because it is a quiet and relaxing place to read books.

× So since due to the busy routine, I it's very difficult for me to find a relaxable time for me to read at home.

✓ So due to the busy routine, it is very difficult for me to find a relaxing time to read at home.

The phrase 'relaxable time' is incorrect; the correct form is 'relaxing time' using the present participle 'relaxing' to describe the time. Also, 'I it's' is incorrect; it should be 'it is' to match the subject 'it'.

× I usually read fictional books and all the adventural books since I'm very interested in those areas.

✓ I usually read fictional books and all the adventurous books since I'm very interested in those areas.

The word 'adventural' is a misspelling of the adjective 'adventurous'. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity and correctness.

× I find time to read those than the magazines and newspapers.

✓ I find time to read those more than the magazines and newspapers.

The sentence lacks the comparative word 'more' before 'than' to correctly express preference. 'More than' is the correct comparative structure.

× So I really enjoy time with reading these things.

✓ So I really enjoy my time reading these things.

The phrase 'enjoy time with reading' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'enjoy my time reading' without the preposition 'with'.

× No, actually, since my mom brought all the irrelevant books for me, I rarely go to the library.

✓ No, actually, since my mom brought all the irrelevant books for me, I rarely went to the library.

The sentence refers to past habits, so the verb tense should be past tense 'went' instead of present 'go'. This is a tense issue but also relates to pronoun reference to past time.

× For one or two times I went to my school library and I remember all the things I had enjoyed there.

✓ One or two times I went to my school library and I remember all the things I enjoyed there.

The past perfect 'had enjoyed' is unnecessary here; simple past 'enjoyed' is sufficient since the events are in the past and the sequence is clear.

× So I think I was thinking that there's no memorable time that I went to a library since I was a kid.

✓ So I think I was thinking that there is no memorable time when I went to a library since I was a kid.

The phrase 'that there's no memorable time' is awkward; 'there is no memorable time when' is more appropriate to refer to a specific time. Also, 'a library' is correct here.

× Actually, I don't know much about this, but overall, all around the world, I think most of the children go to the library then spending the time at home reading their books.

✓ Actually, I don't know much about this, but overall, all around the world, I think most children go to the library rather than spending time at home reading their books.

The phrase 'then spending the time' is incorrect; the correct comparative phrase is 'rather than spending time'. Also, 'most of the children' can be simplified to 'most children'.

× It is fun, very enjoyable to read books with a calm mind and it is very relaxing than the home.

✓ It is fun and very enjoyable to read books with a calm mind, and it is much more relaxing than at home.

The phrase 'very relaxing than the home' is incorrect. The correct comparative form is 'much more relaxing than at home'. Also, 'and' is needed to connect the clauses properly.

× So I think yes, compared to the Chinese kids.

✓ So I think, yes, compared to Chinese kids.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding commas and removing 'the' before 'Chinese kids' makes it clearer. Also, the sentence could be expanded for clarity but correction is limited to grammar.