Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid repeating similar ideas like 'quiet peace' and 'quiet silence'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading different books. Moreover, it provides a quiet environment where I can concentrate and relax.

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to add details. Use specific vocabulary and avoid redundancy.

예시: Usually, I read comedy books or novels in the library to improve my knowledge and reading skills. Also, sometimes I visit the library with my friends to spend quality time together.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using past tense consistently and adding linking words. Also, avoid saying 'forced me' which sounds negative; instead, use 'encouraged me'.

예시: Yes, I definitely went to the library with my mother when I was a kid because she encouraged me to read new books and gain knowledge.

제안: Try to avoid hesitation phrases like 'I'm not sure' and improve coherence by using linking words. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'in a quiet environment'. Make your answer more concise and natural.

예시: I believe Chinese kids often visit libraries because they offer a wide variety of books, including stories and novels. Moreover, libraries provide a peaceful place for reading and studying.

× Yes, most of the time I go to the library whenever I want something to read any book.

✓ Yes, most of the time I go to the library whenever I want to read a book.

The phrase 'want something to read any book' is incorrect. The correct preposition and structure is 'want to read a book'. 'To' is used before the verb 'read' to indicate purpose, and 'a book' is the correct article usage here.

× And even I go to library when I want a quiet peace. Quiet silence, Then I go to the library.

✓ And I also go to the library when I want quiet peace or silence. Then I go to the library.

The phrase 'quiet peace' and 'quiet silence' is redundant and awkward. 'Quiet' is an adjective and 'peace' or 'silence' are nouns; 'quiet peace' is unusual. It's better to say 'quiet peace or silence'. Also, 'go to library' misses the article 'the' before 'library'.

× Number of time I read books of books which are of comedy or sometimes I like to read novels so that I can improve my knowledge and my reading skills with the help of which I can build up my confidence.

✓ A number of times I read books which are comedies, or sometimes I like to read novels so that I can improve my knowledge and my reading skills, with the help of which I can build up my confidence.

The phrase 'Number of time' should be 'A number of times' to correctly indicate plural frequency. Also, 'books of books which are of comedy' is incorrect; it should be 'books which are comedies'.

× So I prefer most prefer to read books and sometimes I go with my friends so that we can spend time.

✓ So I mostly prefer to read books, and sometimes I go with my friends so that we can spend time together.

The phrase 'prefer most prefer' is redundant and incorrect. 'Mostly prefer' is the correct adverb placement. Also, 'spend time' usually requires an object like 'together' to complete the meaning.

× Yes, definitely. I go with my mother to library because my mother forced me so that I try to learn new books and gain my knowledge.

✓ Yes, definitely. I went with my mother to the library because my mother forced me so that I could try to learn new things and gain knowledge.

The question is about past events ('Did you go... when you were a kid?'), so the verb should be in past tense: 'went' instead of 'go'. Also, 'to library' needs the article 'the'. 'Try' should be 'could try' to indicate past ability or attempt. 'Learn new books' is incorrect; one learns from books or learns new things.

× The Chinese kids also go to the library because library is a place where you can find a number of different kinds of story books, novels and A and the thing that you want to read, you can easily find it.

✓ Chinese kids also go to the library because the library is a place where you can find a number of different kinds of storybooks, novels, and anything that you want to read, you can easily find it.

'Library is a place' needs the definite article 'the' before 'library'. 'A and the thing' is incorrect; it should be 'anything'. Also, 'story books' is better as one word 'storybooks'.

× So people can easily go there and read the material which you want with a quiet environment in a quiet environment.

✓ So people can easily go there and read the material they want in a quiet environment.

The phrase 'with a quiet environment in a quiet environment' is redundant and awkward. The correct preposition is 'in' a quiet environment. Also, 'which you want' is better as 'they want' to maintain pronoun consistency.