Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be improved by correcting minor grammatical errors and making the sentences more natural. For example, say "the library" instead of "library" and use "a quiet environment". Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because it offers a quiet environment where I can study without distractions. Additionally, it's convenient to borrow books there, which is more affordable than buying them online or in stores.

제안: Your answer provides relevant information but lacks coherence and contains some repetition. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases. Also, clarify your points with more specific details and correct grammar, such as "do assignments" instead of "make assignments".

예시: I usually read books in the library. Moreover, when I have assignments, I use my monthly membership card to access resources and complete my work there. They also offer digital books, which I find very helpful.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs better sentence structure and grammar. Use past tense consistently and avoid awkward phrases like "very deep down to the comic books." Also, clarify your ideas and avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.

예시: When I was a kid, my school had a library, and I often went there during lunch breaks. I enjoyed reading comic books and sometimes used the computers available in the library.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to give a more direct and structured response. Avoid filler words like "uh" and use clearer vocabulary. For example, express your opinion about library usage among Chinese kids more confidently and clearly.

예시: I'm not sure about all Chinese kids, but I believe that going to the library depends on individual interests. Those who love reading books are more likely to visit the library regularly.

× Yes, I frequently go to library because it has quiet environment where I can study without any distraction.

✓ Yes, I frequently go to the library because it has a quiet environment where I can study without any distraction.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'library' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener. Also, 'quiet environment' needs the indefinite article 'a' because it is a singular countable noun being introduced for the first time.

× Yes, I frequently go to library because it has quiet environment where I can study without any distraction.

✓ Yes, I frequently go to the library because it has a quiet environment where I can study without any distractions.

The word 'distraction' should be plural 'distractions' because it refers to multiple possible disturbances. Using the plural form is more natural in this context.

× Apart from this, it is easy to borrow books and cheaper rather than buying it online or in person.

✓ Apart from this, it is easy to borrow books and cheaper than buying them online or in person.

The phrase 'cheaper rather than buying it' is incorrect. 'Cheaper than buying them' is correct because 'books' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them'. Also, 'than' is the correct comparative conjunction, not 'rather than'.

× Sometimes when I have to make some assignments, I go there because in the library I have a monthly membership card, so I can use it and make assignments over there.

✓ Sometimes when I have to do some assignments, I go there because in the library I have a monthly membership card, so I can use it and do assignments there.

The verb 'make' is incorrect with 'assignments'; the correct verb is 'do'. Also, 'over there' is better simplified to 'there' for naturalness.

× Apart from it, they also have a digital book.

✓ Apart from that, they also have digital books.

'Apart from it' is unnatural; 'Apart from that' is better. Also, 'a digital book' suggests only one book, but libraries usually have multiple digital books, so plural 'digital books' is more appropriate.

× I remember when I was a kid, my school had a library and I often go there on my lunch breaks because I was very deep down to the comic books and I bought comic books from my school library and then I used to use computer.

✓ I remember when I was a kid, my school had a library and I often went there on my lunch breaks because I was very into comic books. I bought comic books from my school library and then I used to use the computer.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. The phrase 'very deep down to the comic books' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'very into comic books'. Also, 'used to use computer' needs the definite article 'the' before 'computer'.

× I bought comic books from my school library and then I used to use computer.

✓ I bought comic books from my school library and then I used to use the computer.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'computer' because it refers to a specific computer known in context.

× Well, I don't know much about the other communities, but, uh, it depends upon the person, not about like the community that goes to the library, but I think that everyone is going to library who is, uh, up to the books who are being deep down love books.

✓ Well, I don't know much about other communities, but it depends on the person, not on the community that goes to the library. I think that everyone who loves books goes to the library.

'The other communities' should be 'other communities' without 'the' because it refers to communities in general. 'Depends upon' is better as 'depends on'. 'Going to library' needs the definite article 'the library'. The phrase 'up to the books who are being deep down love books' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'who loves books' for clarity and correctness.