Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answers more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors to improve clarity and naturalness.

예시: Yes, I usually go to the library every two weeks. I mainly borrow Punjabi literature books, but I also enjoy reading English psychology books because they have a strong impact on my thinking.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases and improve sentence structure for better flow. Be specific about your activities in the library.

예시: Usually, I go to the library to borrow books because I prefer reading at home. However, I also use the library's computers and internet to complete my assignments.

제안: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your experience. Avoid unnecessary repetition and improve vocabulary usage.

예시: As a child, I lived in a place without a public library, so I used my school's impressive library. There, I enjoyed reading various literature and fiction books, and I was friendly with the teacher who managed the library.

제안: Provide a clear and direct answer to the question. Use correct grammar and avoid confusing phrases. Support your opinion with specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I believe it depends on the individual child. Some Chinese kids visit the library often because they enjoy reading, while others may not due to different interests or habits.

× A Reading books is one of my hobby.

✓ Reading books is one of my hobbies.

The noun 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' because it refers to one of multiple hobbies. Also, the article 'A' is unnecessary before 'Reading books'.

× I used to take out of the bookstore, read it.

✓ I used to take books out of the library and read them.

The phrase 'take out of the bookstore' is incorrect; it should be 'take books out of the library'. Also, 'bookstore' is a place to buy books, not borrow. 'Read it' should be 'read them' to agree with plural 'books'.

× I mainly read the like a Punjabi literature books and something and sometimes English book as well.

✓ I mainly read Punjabi literature books and sometimes English books as well.

The phrase 'the like a' is incorrect and unnecessary. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' to match the context. 'Something' is vague and unnecessary here.

× Like I used to read a psychology books and then they have a great impressive impact on my mind.

✓ I used to read psychology books and they had a great impressive impact on my mind.

The article 'a' should not be used before plural 'psychology books'. Also, tense correction is needed (past tense) to match 'used to'.

× Normal people go to library to read the books, but if I talk about me, I go to the library to take over the books and I prefer to read them at my home and I use sometimes I go to a library as well for like they use the computer and the Internet and I make my assignments as well over there.

✓ Normal people go to the library to read books, but if I talk about myself, I go to the library to borrow books and I prefer to read them at home. Sometimes I also go to the library to use the computer and the Internet and do my assignments there.

'Go to library' should be 'go to the library' (article error). 'Take over the books' is incorrect; 'borrow books' is appropriate. 'At my home' should be 'at home'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and grammar.

× When I was a kid, I was in a blaze where there is no library.

✓ When I was a kid, I was in a place where there was no library.

'Blaze' is incorrect; the correct word is 'place'. Also, 'there is no library' should be past tense 'there was no library' to match 'was'.

× So I go to the library in my school and my school there is a quite impressive library where I used to read the books about different literatures and fictions.

✓ So I went to the library in my school, and my school had a quite impressive library where I used to read books about different literatures and fiction.

Tense correction: 'go' should be 'went' to match past context. 'My school there is' is incorrect; 'my school had' is correct. 'Literatures' should be 'literature' (uncountable). 'Fictions' should be 'fiction' (uncountable).

× And I have a good friendship with my teacher of who used to give a duty in the library over there.

✓ And I had a good friendship with my teacher who used to be on duty in the library there.

Tense correction: 'have' to 'had' for past. 'Teacher of who' is incorrect; correct is 'teacher who'. 'Give a duty' is incorrect; 'be on duty' is appropriate.

× I think it all depends upon the individuals. Is there not any religion who go to the library often and some reasons not?

✓ I think it all depends on the individuals. There is no religion whose members all go to the library often, and some do not for various reasons.

'Depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more common. 'Is there not any religion who go' is incorrect; correct is 'There is no religion whose members all go'. 'Some reasons not' is incomplete; needs clarification.

× It's all depend upon the individual, how the mindset are you develop and what are your hobbies and other things etcetera.

✓ It all depends on the individual, how the mindset you develop is, and what your hobbies and other interests are.

'It's all depend' should be 'It all depends' (subject-verb agreement). 'Mindset are you develop' is incorrect; correct is 'mindset you develop is'. Sentence structure improved for clarity.