Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, correct small grammar mistakes like 'a a' and use more natural expressions.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library because as a school student, I have many deadlines. The quiet atmosphere helps me concentrate, and sometimes I go with friends, which motivates us to study together.

제안: Your answer has some grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Use present tense consistently and avoid unnecessary words. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific examples.

예시: Usually, I study and complete my homework in the library. Sometimes, I research information for my projects or presentations because the books there are very helpful.

제안: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and more natural phrasing. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to be more concise.

예시: No, I didn't go to the library as a kid. I first started visiting it when I entered high school because the curriculum became harder, and I needed a quiet place to study more effectively.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition like 'their their'. Also, explain your ideas more clearly and use linking words.

예시: As far as I know, many Chinese students often go to the library because the education system is very demanding. They memorize a lot and study hard to meet the challenging requirements.

× Yes, I do visit libraries temporarily because I'm a a school student and I have a lot of appointments and deadlines so the atmosphere there helps me to get more concentrated and sometimes I go there with my friends and it helps us to motivate each other and I just love the vibe there.

✓ Yes, I do visit libraries temporarily because I'm a school student and I have a lot of appointments and deadlines so the atmosphere there helps me to concentrate more and sometimes I go there with my friends and it helps us to motivate each other and I just love the vibe there.

The sentence contains a repeated article 'a a' which is incorrect. Also, 'get more concentrated' is not the correct collocation; the correct phrase is 'concentrate more'. Articles should be used correctly to avoid redundancy and improve clarity.

× As many students, I studied there and complete my assignments and homeworks.

✓ Like many students, I studied there and completed my assignments and homework.

The sentence mixes past tense 'studied' with present tense 'complete'. To maintain tense consistency, 'complete' should be changed to past tense 'completed'. Also, 'homeworks' is incorrect; 'homework' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× But sometimes, of course, I came there to research for the information that I need for my projects or presentations.

✓ But sometimes, of course, I came there to research the information that I needed for my projects or presentations.

The sentence uses present tense 'need' with past tense 'came'. To keep tense consistency, 'need' should be changed to past tense 'needed'. Also, 'research for' is incorrect; 'research' is a transitive verb and does not require 'for'.

× No I didn't. First time I visited the library was when I moved to the high school because the high school curriculum is much harder and I had a need to concentrate and study more.

✓ No, I didn't. The first time I visited the library was when I moved to high school because the high school curriculum was much harder and I needed to concentrate and study more.

The sentence lacks the article 'The' before 'first time'. Also, 'the high school' should be 'high school' without 'the' when referring to school in general. 'Is' should be changed to past tense 'was' to match the past context. 'Had a need to' is better expressed as 'needed to' for naturalness.

× As far as I'm concerned, yes, because in China lots of students study by heart because of their their study system.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, yes, because in China lots of students study by heart because of their study system.

The sentence contains a repeated pronoun 'their their' which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate improves clarity and correctness.

× It's really hard and challenging so that they always try to study by maximum.

✓ It's really hard and challenging so they always try to study to the maximum.

The phrase 'study by maximum' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'study to the maximum' to indicate doing something to the fullest extent. Also, 'so that' is unnecessary here and can be replaced with 'so' for smoother flow.