Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "I don't often go" and then explaining twice. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I rarely go to the library because my country doesn't have a public one. Instead, I usually research information online.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and ends abruptly. Make sure to finish your sentences. Also, add linking words and more specific details to enrich your answer.

예시: I usually visit the library to read books about software, networks, and hardware because I want to improve my technical knowledge and skills.

제안: Your answer has good structure but contains grammar mistakes and redundancy. Use correct tenses and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like "firstly" and "secondly" properly.

예시: No, I didn't go to the library as a child for two reasons. Firstly, my country didn't have a library. Secondly, I usually played outside with my friends.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: Actually, I don't have much information about that. However, from advertisements I have seen, it seems that China is developing its education system to encourage children to read more.

× I usually visit the library to read books about software, networks and hardware to improve my knowledge and.

✓ I usually visit the library to read books about software, networks, and hardware to improve my knowledge.

The sentence ends with 'and' without completing the conjunction, which is incorrect. The conjunction 'and' should connect two elements, but here it is left hanging. Removing 'and' corrects the sentence structure.

× No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child because for two reasons.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child for two reasons.

The phrase 'because for two reasons' is redundant and awkward. 'Because' and 'for' both indicate reason, so using both together is incorrect. Removing 'because' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× The second reason when I was a children I usually go to go to outside with my friends.

✓ The second reason is that when I was a child, I usually went outside with my friends.

'Children' is plural, but the sentence refers to a singular subject 'I', so 'child' should be used. Also, 'go to go to outside' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'went outside'. The verb tense should be past tense 'went' to match 'when I was a child'.

× The second reason when I was a children I usually go to go to outside with my friends.

✓ The second reason is that when I was a child, I usually went outside with my friends.

The phrase 'go to outside' is incorrect; 'outside' is an adverb here and does not require the preposition 'to'. The correct form is simply 'went outside'.

× Actually I don't have any information about that, but when I see the advertisement advertising about the China, I see how how much the China is develop his people.

✓ Actually, I don't have any information about that, but when I see advertisements about China, I see how much China is developing its people.

'The China' is incorrect; 'China' as a country name does not take 'the'. Also, 'advertisement advertising about the China' is redundant and awkward; 'advertisements about China' is better. 'Develop his people' is incorrect; 'developing its people' is correct because 'China' is a country and uses 'its' as possessive pronoun. The verb tense 'is developing' fits the present continuous context.