Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và nói dài dòng không cần thiết. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Yes, I often go to the library at my university because it has a huge and modern facility. I enjoy reading books there and working in a peaceful environment, which helps me concentrate better.

제안: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh sử dụng nhiều từ ngập ngừng như "umm", "uh". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ, sử dụng liên từ để câu nói mạch lạc hơn.

예시: Usually, I study alone in the library because it is a quiet place that helps me focus. Sometimes, I go there with my classmates to discuss group projects.

제안: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ ngữ lặp lại. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và cung cấp lý do cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

예시: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I preferred more active activities like playing video games or sports.

제안: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và nói không rõ ý. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và liên từ để làm rõ ý kiến của bạn.

예시: Yes, I believe Chinese kids often go to the library because the education system in China is quite demanding, so students need to study hard and use the library resources frequently.

× Yes, for sure if my school, my university has a huge and modern library in the in it, so I often go to library after studying.

✓ Yes, for sure, if my school or my university has a huge and modern library in it, I often go to the library after studying.

The original sentence has incorrect use of 'in the in it' which is redundant and confusing. Also, 'go to library' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'library'. The corrected sentence fixes these issues by removing redundancy and adding the article 'the'.

× I really enjoy reading books and you know, working in the peaceful environment.

✓ I really enjoy reading books and, you know, working in a peaceful environment.

The phrase 'in the peaceful environment' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' when referring to a general environment. It should be 'a peaceful environment' to indicate any peaceful environment, not a specific one.

× I think the library is, umm, a peaceful environment and it's so, and suitable for you for students to, uh, study and focus.

✓ I think the library is, umm, a peaceful environment and it's suitable for students to study and focus.

The phrase 'suitable for you for students' is incorrect and redundant. It should be 'suitable for students'. Also, the sentence is simplified for clarity and correctness.

× I open up to the library to, to learn by myself, or sometimes I go with my classmates or my friend, my teammates to uh, to the.

✓ I go to the library to learn by myself, or sometimes I go with my classmates or my friends, my teammates.

The phrase 'I open up to the library' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I go to the library'. Also, 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' to match 'classmates' and 'teammates'. The sentence ending 'to uh, to the.' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× No, I remember I did. I did not go to the library when I were a kid.

✓ No, I remember I did. I did not go to the library when I was a kid.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for the singular subject 'I' in past tense. The correct form is 'was'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue in past tense.

× Umm, at that time my, I might prefer, I may prefer interesting, uh, interesting and energetic activities like playing video games or playing sports sports, umm, rather than.

✓ Umm, at that time, I preferred interesting and energetic activities like playing video games or playing sports rather than going to the library.

The use of 'might prefer' and 'may prefer' is incorrect when referring to a past habitual action. The past tense 'preferred' is appropriate here. Also, the sentence was incomplete and is completed for clarity.

× I think Chinese kids go to library very often because I, I see that, I can see that the education in Chinese in China is very complicated and, you know, very hard children and students have.

✓ I think Chinese kids go to the library very often because I can see that education in China is very complicated and, you know, children and students have a lot of hard work.

The phrase 'go to library' lacks the definite article 'the'. 'Education in Chinese in China' is awkward; corrected to 'education in China'. The phrase 'very hard children and students have' is incomplete and unclear; clarified to 'children and students have a lot of hard work'. Also, plural 'children and students' is maintained correctly.