Library— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide clearer reasons. For example, instead of saying "reading book is not enjoyable for me" and "I seldom read books," you could say "I rarely go to the library because I don't enjoy reading books." Also, avoid unnecessary hesitation sounds like "uh."

예시: No, I rarely go to the library because I don't enjoy reading books. Instead, I prefer spending my free time playing video games or doing workouts to relax, as I consider myself quite an active person.

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly with a topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds and improve sentence structure for better coherence.

예시: I usually study or do research when I go to the library because it is a great place to concentrate and find reliable information. Therefore, I would visit the library whenever I need to focus on my studies.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by removing filler words and correcting grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid repetition. Also, complete your sentences fully for clarity.

예시: I didn't go to the library when I was a child because I was very energetic and preferred playing outside and doing sports. Therefore, the library was not an appealing place for me at that time.

제안: Avoid hesitation sounds and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use appropriate linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with subject-verb agreement and try to use more precise vocabulary.

예시: I believe Chinese children often visit the library because it is a comfortable place for studious people. Since Chinese students tend to study hard, the library is an ideal environment for them.

× No, I don't often go to the library since reading book is not enjoyable for me.

✓ No, I don't often go to the library since reading books is not enjoyable for me.

The noun 'book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to reading in general, which involves multiple books, not just one.

× However, I spend my free time for playing video games or work workouts, uh, for relaxing and I found myself as an active person.

✓ However, I spend my free time playing video games or doing workouts, uh, to relax and I find myself to be an active person.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used after 'spend my free time'. The correct structure is 'spend time doing something'. Also, 'work workouts' is awkward; 'doing workouts' is better. 'For relaxing' should be 'to relax' to express purpose. 'Found' should be 'find' to maintain present tense.

× Uh, libraries a great place to concentrate on the find the reliable information.

✓ Uh, libraries are a great place to concentrate and find reliable information.

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'libraries'. Also, 'concentrate on the find' is incorrect; it should be 'concentrate and find'. The article 'the' before 'reliable information' is unnecessary here.

× I think I would go there if I do them.

✓ I think I would go there if I needed to.

The phrase 'if I do them' is unclear and ungrammatical. It should be replaced with a conditional phrase that makes sense in context, such as 'if I needed to'.

× I usually played outside and do some sports.

✓ I usually played outside and did some sports.

The verb 'do' should be in the past tense 'did' to match the past tense 'played' and maintain tense consistency.

× Therefore, library was the worst place for me during the during my.

✓ Therefore, the library was the worst place for me during that time.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the article 'the' before 'library'. Also, 'during the during my' is incorrect and should be replaced with 'during that time' for clarity.

× since the library is a very comfortable place for people who is very studious, umm, and the Chinese people uh, tend to study so hard.

✓ since the library is a very comfortable place for people who are very studious, umm, and the Chinese people, uh, tend to study very hard.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'people' which is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'study so hard' is better expressed as 'study very hard'.

× Therefore, uh library must be the best place for Chinese kids.

✓ Therefore, uh, the library must be the best place for Chinese kids.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' to specify the place being referred to.